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Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 2 - Of Dark Lords and Mystics
I changed some stuff, hope it worked out.
Sep 3, 2017 -
Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 4 - First Day at Work
The reason why I wanted to keep the waking up part was, if i didn't, what would the segue be? It would throw readers off, and I don't want to ...
Sep 3, 2017 -
Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 2 - Of Dark Lords and Mystics
I always have them doing something though, I don't understand why you still have a problem with this. Please point out to me the exact unnecessary dialogue tags so I ...
Sep 3, 2017 -
Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 4 - First Day at Work
I can't remove the drive there, because what she's feeling and thinking is important, and I can't remove her waking up, it would be too much of a jump. I ...
Sep 3, 2017 -
Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 4 - First Day at Work
I'm going to include how she's feeling after Skyler walks in in the new chapter, that's the point of a cliffhanger, to hold back information for the next chapter. I ...
Sep 3, 2017 -
Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 3 - Back to Earth
I went through with a spell checker and didn't find any bad grammar, can you point me to where it is?
Sep 2, 2017 -
Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 3 - Back to Earth
I'm glad you liked it! I think I put as much as I could into describing things, thank you for your review!
Sep 2, 2017 -
Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 2 - Of Dark Lords and Mystics
No, you reviewed perfectly, I said capitol instead of capital, thank you for helping me out with that. I hope my edits are to you liking, have a great day!
Sep 2, 2017 -
Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 1 - Longing for the Dreamer
You made a lot of sense, and I singled out some of the stuff you told me to change. You were right that I had a misspelling and wrong punctuation ...
Sep 2, 2017 -
Re: Viggo's Break - Chapter 16 - Settling scores
Sorry for the long wait, was busy with my own story, hope you have a good day too!
Sep 2, 2017 -
Re: Viggo's Break - Chapter 16 - Settling scores
'he was into rasors' should be 'he was into razors , 'Russ had commited the code to memory' should be 'Russ had committed the code to memory' Those were the ...
Sep 2, 2017 -
Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 2 - Of Dark Lords and Mystics
Also I did the spacing thing everyone was wanting me to do. I hope that makes it easier for you to read.
Sep 2, 2017 -
Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 2 - Of Dark Lords and Mystics
I added more descriptions and was more specific in certain areas (someone else pointed it out to me) hope it's better than it was :)
Sep 2, 2017 -
Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 2 - Of Dark Lords and Mystics
I added a few descriptions and edited things accordingly, I hope it's to your liking. :)
Sep 2, 2017 -
Re: The Light Maiden's Mark, Chapter 2 - Of Dark Lords and Mystics
I guess I didn't fix the Ms in the last chapter on here, please note that I have multiple places that I post, also it may have been updated by ...
Sep 2, 2017
