AneiDoru

Yes, I did, I tried to do what I could.

I see multiple parts in the chapter where it says what she's feeling, I don't get where you are coming from here.

I do put in her feelings though, they are there multiple times in the chapter, I had to remove some because there was too much.

Also I can't add what she's feeling because it would be considered fluff.

I added to what she was feeling but someone told me to remove it.

I finished editing, thank you for your input, I edited accordingly, if there's still problems, please reply to my reply.

I used a web one, i thought you meant grammar like spelling.

But now I have to change present tense to past tense :/

I didn't mean Incubated, google intubation. It's the process of putting a tube into the person's trachea.

I just noticed that the title says ten years later, but that isn't ACTUALLY ten years later.

No, this isn't ten years in the future, I don't know where you got that from.

I didn't read the rest of the story but I really liked it, and hope you make more!

I only got rid of the last sentence, that's all the editing I'm doing from this review, also I don't like needlessly cutting out dialogue all that much, so I ...

I'm still constantly editing things, so check back once in a while to re-read and make any suggestions.

I did what I could, it's past midnight here, I will try to fix punctuation tomorrow. I will bookmark the link you gave me. Hope the editing is mostly to ...