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Re: Fate - Chapter 2: Flooding Tears
Hey that was a very good story. I thought you could have put a lot more emotion into it. I don't know if I am right but a phrase like ...
Jan 21, 2011 -
Re: Pregnant Majesty - Chapter Two
A kind of an uninteresting topic that seemed rather incomplete in the end. I think you could have done a much better job with the characters of the story.
Jan 21, 2011 -
Re: Return
Hi, I liked your poetry. That One can be truly awoken (awaken)
Feb 15, 2010 -
Re: The Miracle
Dear All, I know this is a bit lengthy. But please read and post your valuable comments. The garden was in full bloom with flowers of different colours in full ...
Feb 15, 2010 -
Re: Bruised and Broken
Hi, Very good, very touchingly dramatic. Keep it up.
Feb 15, 2010 -
Re: what if?
Your opening line is not understood as it brings out no meaning and the grammar is bad. "Her Traces back to times........." (not understood)
Feb 15, 2010 -
Re: Cursed
Very, very good. I enjoyed the poem. Really very romantic and very well written. Would love to read some more of your work. Shabash and keep it up
Feb 10, 2010 -
Re: Arguing with the Clock
Hi Kibble, That was good. Very Imaginative and fun to read. You must take care though to read before you submit your work. "Well, nobody, which is clearly why the ...
Feb 10, 2010 -
Re: When He Fell
That is really good. You are really imaginative and can put your imaginative thoughts to paper extremely well. Very well written with the punctuation marks in place. Achees
Feb 9, 2010 -
Re: broken windows are beautiful
Hi Zenjoy, Did you avoid to put capital letters at the beginning of sentences on purpose or was it just oversight? Since you have classified your writing as Lyric, I ...
Feb 8, 2010 -
Re: Ask a question here (or start a new topic!)
Hi Nate, What is an ICQ Number and where can I get one?
Feb 5, 2010 -
Re: You
I think the word electricity in a love poem seemed a bit unromantic. You could probably replace it with 'shudder' or 'shiver' or 'sparkle' which may be more romantic. Anchees
Feb 5, 2010 -
Re: Fallen Angel Halo
Hi Fantasy, Very good, I liked you poem, short and sweet. I however think the use of commas would enhance its expression. Anyway I'm new to the creative writing as ...
Feb 5, 2010 -
Re: The Loving Ghost
Thanks Rachel and Pudin for reading my posts and commenting on them. I feel very secure with my writing now, knowing that I can write, and even if there are ...
Feb 5, 2010 -
Re: Welcome New Members! [2]
Hello and welcome to the site! We're glad to meet you. You can use this thread to talk to fellow newbies or whatever, or you can make your own post ...
Feb 5, 2010
