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Re: How Could You?
This is a great poem!! I've never really been able to write poems so I think anyone who can is talented. The only thing I saw that is wrong with ...
Oct 5, 2010 -
Re: Invisibles. Prologue (Revised)
I revised the prologue from my novel Invisibles. I will be posting the revised versions of the other four chapters. Tell me what you think . :D Prologue: I circled ...
Oct 5, 2010 -
Re: Invisibles ~ Chapters 1 -2
Chapters 1 and 2 for Invisibles. Review Please :D Chapter 1: The Beginning My name is Idda Jones and I am a cop. I am fifteen and have a gift ...
Oct 5, 2010 -
Re: Tricked Chapter 2
2. “Ow.” I mumbled into his hair. “You’re fine.” He said, reaching up to kiss me on my lips before moving to my neck again. I felt the pain again, ...
Oct 5, 2010 -
Re: Inner Beauty
Wow. This. Is Great. I. Loved. It. SO MUCH!!! Alzora
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: The Breakup
Wow, this is soooo cool!! I didn't see anything wrong with it except... When she prank calls Cooper is that in the past or present? Alzora
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: Miracle, (just make one)
Wow, I had no idea people could actually think up songs like that... YOU'RE AMAZING!! This is a cool song, I wish I could hear it sung... Alzora
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: The Bubble That Did Not Burst
This is a little confusing. How did she die? When you say 'hit the shower' it's a little awkward. Your grammar could be a little better, try to use spaces ...
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: Lair of Beast
Hi, this is scary, but I like it!! It's understandable!!! I think it needs a little more explanation about how it got to the point that it's at. Also, more ...
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: A Small Dog's Major Problem (Edit)
This is ok, it's a little boring in my opinion. I don't know why the little dog doesn't like his name so much? It's ok. It's not like he was ...
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: Journey To A New World
Hi, this story is cool. I loooove the way that you describe the hot air balloon. I don't really get why your main character wanted to go up in it ...
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: Totally Different
This is cool. It sounds just like I've always read about public school (I'm home schooled). I think it adds a cool ring to it the way it rhymes.
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: The Vampire's Story: A New Begining
This is good, but a little confusing. I also thought Twilight when I first saw it. I think it needs a little more explanation and emotion for the main character...
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: Here I Am
This (I think) is really well written. It has great emotion!! Love it!!
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: The Shapeshifter- Chapter 1
This is a really good story, I think it has potential.:D Your spaces aren't so great, try to (whenever you hit Enter or Return) make an actual space between words, ...
Oct 4, 2010
