AlyKat

With a gray hood over my I couldn't see anything, but that was the least of my problems. My hands were feeling soft and wet, almost as if they out ...

Duuddee i love this! I dont really like robots but this makes me want to have a conversation! This could be a really good short story and i love it ...

Little fish in the pond swimming so free The birds in the sky flying with glee Spring has come and all animals stir From the mouse in the corner To ...

DON'T FORGET Hold on, just hold on Just for a little while longer Don't fall, don't you dare fall The stars have no claim on you yet Chorus: Never forget ...

(Well just to start, you have to indent the first sentence in a paragraph) Friday night (,) Paul decided to go out clubbing (Run-on sentence) . He walked up to ...

I know its short but its just an introduction

February eleventh, three days till valentines day. Fights stink, we all know that. But what happens when it drives you to cut? Or makes you feel like all you're there ...

The small car moved slowly, making tyre (tire) tracks in the snow. Not many people lived around this road. A short middle-aged woman was behind the wheel, her eyes hid ...

Thump, thump, that is the sound Katelyn’s heart made when she made her horse speed up. Katelyn and her sister Holly were running from the Dalen’s. The first sentence sounds ...

I could hear the screams of the dying, the living calling to their friends, and every sound in between. The vampire massacre was horrible .The government could not stop the ...

I love the story line and considering i say that its good :) I love the description and in the first few paragraphs and if this gets to be a ...

Hey i think this is great!! But to me i think maybe varying the paragraph lengths would really help make this something amazing. I was involved in the story and ...

I agree with the others that description is important and should be included more...I love this story line and i think that it could go somewhere :)

I love the story line! But i really think that the titled could do with out the depressed part. And non-fiction is about a real this about a real event?!? ...

In it you miss spelled always and scarf..But i really love a story where you can actually get a visual in your head of what it would be like..I really ...