Alteran

Well, first I noticed it's not formatted correctly. The dialogue is fine but actions are italicized. It makes it hard to distinguish between speech and action. Not to be rude ...

Adam looked out into the blackness. They were in the inbetween at last. They had stayed at Alereon a very long time. At least 2 weeks. Heather was a much ...

Dont post things you rushed through. It shows a rather large lack of caring for your work, we're not going to do it for you. We offer help and advice ...

can you feel the pain lingering through your v[s]a[/s] e ins it can ' t escape it wont escape it's now [s]pernament[/s] permanent to your blood you're now suffering an ...

:thud: Dont hate me, you know the smileys cool. I appreciate you rating all this and adding a warning in your titles.

"But, we dont know what will happen to them. They're not exactly whole human." argued Greg "We cant raise them like this. As much as i want to keep them, ...

Well...I totally have the perfect thing to use it on. It says everything I need to say without words :)

Happy slappy super sillytastic uber cool woot woot birthday!

O_O I just posted that in the chat room like 2 seconds ago....How do you DO that?

It really depends on the author and the project. I doint really plan until after the entire first draft is done. Then i have a notebook that a go crazy ...

"The balance was screwed out of whack and has been for a long time," said Greg, "We have to fix this." "We'll go with you!" said Sara. Owen agreed instantly. ...

Adam looked deep into Alice's mind. It was easy when she slept. There was no sign of Jay, only a few fragments of memory. "That could be useful," he said ...

Let me think....I'm making an MMORPG....Majoring in Game Design....and am trying to get a job at Square-Enix. I dont think I am. Of course I am! RTS, RPG and MMORPG ...

Name - Berello Gender - male Age - 29 Appearance - nothing special, not fat, but not really skinny. No muscle tone. Brown hair, blue eyes. Race - Human (Has ...

You're not calling someone that name. It's part of literature. A sad part but a part all the same. It's not illegal to use it in writing.