Alteran

Creepy. Love the ending, very surprising and even more creepy. You made good use of a short amount of Space and had a very good impact. Well done.

Doing the math, I must have been on my bike heading back home, but what difference does it make really? My grandfather is dead and I can't bring him back. ...

Cant let the Familia have no crits. The first part made me giggle. The rest of it confused me. This is like no help to you but I have not ...

I enjoyed this. I would have never got it if you hadn't said it was about your violin. It is a very interesting way to describe it. Of course i ...

Adam passed by the well and looked down. "Wierdos," he muttered as he continued down the clean prestine halls of the new YWS. Where were the new headquarters? Everything was ...

Adam jumped into his Captains chair and took control of the ship. The fighters pelted out of the side, opening fire at once on the Spammian fighters. The Highwind turned ...

To Kill a Mockingbird is a book that takes a revealing look at childhood, integrity, and prejudice. However, the relevance of its title is not immediately obvious. Harper Lee uses ...

Here is the New CCF Belias. As you can see she fires a butt load of Pulse cannons and that lovely beam is the HellFire Cannon

Adam stumbled a little as he ran down the halls of the CCF's hidden rooms. They'd had a strong foothold in TSR but with the arrival of YWS, SPEW would ...

Greg pretended to accept this. He attempted to dig a little into Derby's mind but found it blocked. not just from Greg, but Derby himself could not attain what was ...

The first one has a very nice set up. The placement is good and the background helps to pop the subject. I dont like the darkness of the two greensih ...

"Warning. Warning. Enemy Vessels on starboard side," chimed the Computer. Adam glanced sideways at the Spammian Destroyer. Fighters were pelting out of its underside and firing at the Highwind. "Compu

How...uhh...I'm a little scared to be honest. It has a nice way of it, I think it would b more of a spoken kind of song as some areas dont ...

Well...This needs a bit of work. Your characters are flat like pancakes. They need substance and personality. You had some but not enough to really give the characters a more ...

Athena is gorgeous. You did very well on her form and clothing. The glow around is a nice touch for a god. Aphrodite is equally as beautiful, though her presence ...