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Oh my, this was very strong. You're word choice was excelletn and made me look deeper but didn't confuse me. I thought it was suposed to be flame. It sounded ...

It's to abstract to gain anything from. You have to have a hapy medium so it's not flat but not so complex no one gets it. I dont get it. ...

Adam could barely feel Bella, she was scared. He was there, the imposter was going to get her and Adam was dying. Poisoned by the monster." How selfish of you, ...

it is a nice poem. I thought you were a little to direct. It's good to use metaphors and such to make the reader look past the words. You want ...

"Emily!" Alles called, "Use your powers! Fight back!" Rick was holding her, staring into her cringing face. "I've got it!" Ileria rushed oiver holding an old spell book. She started ...

Yeah, the line repeat was terrible. I liked it, the imagery was good, but it didn't seem to flow. It was thick and clanky. I like the general feel it ...

*drops dead from fear* *.* Scary. Calculus would make me gouge my eyes out too. :)

Colin was growing tired of the merry-go-round of the conversation. Quinn insisted he was a boy, while everyone else was convinced otherwise. "How about we call you it?" Colin asked ...

I liked it, reminds of Evanessence. Hopefully that isn't an insult to you, but the idea made me think of her and I hear Amy Lee's voice when I read ...

Very nice. I especially like the first pic. The second one reminds of evil doings being afoot. :) Puppy!! *huggles*

Is it a duet? I think you better finish it soon, it reminds me of Scooby-Doo. It looks good so far.

ermm......Where's Brad when you need him? I suck at math, so much of this went over my head. I dont know. *bursts into wild applause*

An interesting concept, very beowulf-esqe. I suggest more figurative language as you descripbe things. It will help add to the mystical feel of the poem.

Chapter II: Sentinel Lloyd walked into the living room and switched the television on. He crashed onto the couch, lifting his feet onto the coffee table as white light slowly ...

Bartemius says, I'm all in favor of keeping dangerous weapons out of the hands of fools. Let's start with typewriters. - Solomon Short I voted for Bartemius, he tells me ...