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You didn't use quotation marks for dialogue, which I didn't understand. You swore quite often and it added little to the story. If anything it detracted from it since the ...

Another Atlantis inspired Art. This is Sabrina's car as described in chapter 9. The green rings you see in the reflection are the hover rings. The windows are actually glass, ...

Well done. You created an overlapping effect so some of the circles cover parts of the flower and disotort along with allowing the flower to cover some of the swirls. ...

Creepy. Nora looks ready to kill and Ivy looks like a stern school teacher. The lighting is a problem. It's casting shadows on the dolls and removing some of their ...

Interesting, I didn't realize it was animated until the words vanished. I thought I was going crazy. I'll help you out, Clau, if you get to deep into it. You ...

err...I dont have a lue as to what it's about. I think it has something to do with the World coming to an end all the people working as one, ...

Looks very cool, reminds of the Simpsons, only not stupid. They look kinda scared of each other, and their lips aren't really touching. Cute nonetheless.

O_O I just got a little chill. The words were seamless, I mean they just went in and out and it never chopped up or anything. I really think this ...

It sounded good. The beginning was a little rocky but it really flowed along nicely after that. Stupid Boys! I like the ryhme scheme, it helped keep the song moving.

An interesting image if a critiquer. I liked the imagery very much and th feeling was rather amusing. I'm sure many people have felt this way after a critique.

Adam felt his friends struggle, with a fleeting though he stood on the bridge, watching his friends fight the imposter. "You will not leave this place alive." The fighting stopped, ...

Colin zommed around the Dragon's head, trying to divert the beasts attention. It had little effect. He allowed anger to fill him, to consume his every corner of being. "Hey! ...

*removed*

It has anice idea, but i would think it would give a little insight into how to solve the problem. You've just riddled us with questions with no real conclusion ...

I liked it very much, it was strong, the words were dominating and kept my interest. The meaning was easy to see, but the way you described it was sweeping. ...