Alteran

Banned for not liking Hey Jude

Banned for seizing the day.

Nikola clenched his jaw and tears committed suicide off of the bridge of his nose. That was a brilliant description. I thought this was much better than number four as ...

This was dark. Very dark and wonderful. I don't have a very clear picture of Paul. You might choose to expand on his look later, but for now I would ...

If you scale down the image it will help clear the fuzziness. I can't really see it all at once cause of how massive it is, but I do agree ...

It's a pretty cool pic. I love eclipses. Just a thought though, maybe try resizing the picture and cropping some of the black. Other than that it has a cool ...

It would be a plague [s]of locusts[/s] of biblical proportions. Reluctantly, his hearing returned, and suddenly shouts and curses and whispered voices obscured by a rainstorm of static slipped into ...

It is well done, the proportions look good. His forehead is kind of small though. from the looks of it the top of his head slopes downward. Other than that ...

Hi AJ. Welcome to YWS and hide you kitties. SPEW will eat them. *shifty eyes* Happy you joined, make yourself at home and enjoy all the various part of the ...

I agree with Snoink, it really needs the cold cut factual tone to pull of how terrible this is. As it is it sounds so normal and free flowing that ...

*giggle* These were interesting. I really like the first one, oh the memories. The second was funny, but I agree the last line is hindering the effect. I laughed before ...

I like the acrylic painting, the faces are very proportional and have a great abstract quality. The coloured pencil one is really cool. I'm terrible with them, but you pulled ...

This is interesting. I like the diary format, it moves rather quickly though. Something odd to me is that I don't think the person writing the diary would use quotations ...

Not a literary piece. Moved to the lounge. *moved*

You sound very interesting. I'm a hug history buff, not a historical fiction writer though. So count on me to point out your historical inaccuracies. Just kidding. But I am ...