Alteran

The doors slid open and Alice came in. Adam was overjoyed to see her. She went straight to Jay's cell. "Hi Honey," said Jay. Alice deactivated the Holding field and ...

Alles opened the main chaber and shut the door, once everyone was in. Rick put Emily on the ground. Not ver soft but it would have to do. Alles spun ...

"Love is blind," Greg said, "She was going to use my soul to infuse in him and hope that it would strip away the torment in his mind." "How do ...

Well. This was nice. It did get a little repetitive but you had a rhythm, but you broke it. You set it well and almost followed it the whole way ...

Aww, that's cool. Nice use of words in a creative and thougtful way. :D

Adam walked into the Brig. Jay seemed to be in a lapse of puking. "Alice is on her way back and she's assured us that you are going to die ...

I think the eyes in the first pic are a little to far apart. Just a smidge and the second one looks great. It'll be better once you finish it. ...

It's wings. They are created with Particles which goves them the look of fluid and trasparency. So he has wings without actually having them.

Looks good. Your Grammar looks great. The way you write draws me in far enough that I cant stand it when it stops. Gah! Waiting for more

You damn near killed us by leaving," Greg said. "I hate to say it, but we're all safer here." "Yeah, Matt's powers activate when there is danger near. When we ...

"How long does that spell really last?" asked Adam as the stodd outside the Brig, enjoying Jay's sounds of Misery. "Like an hour." "Nice. I could listen to it all ...

"Drop the field," Matt said. Adam clicked the Button and the field was gone. Jay leapt to his feet ready to fight. Matt simply pulled out his master Spatual and ...

"It's not safe for her to sleep yet." Alles said. Iniside the high chamber is a seal that prevents all magic from entereing. It should stop that man from invading ...

"Hello there Jay," said Matt. Adam stood behind him against the wall. "I'll kill you all once I escape," said Jay, grinning. "Oh, Ned says hi." Jay's face went pale. ...

7/10 What is eunuch? uhhhh.........*cries*