AlphaGirl01

I know I'm a bit late on reviewing this, but I just happened to venture upon it and I think it's pretty good. I've seen a couple of grammatical mistakes, ...

This story was...amazing! I agree with Evi (hi, Evi!) with you abruptly changing the subject to music. My suggestion is maybe say something like this: It reminded me of the ...

Hey, AlphaGirl here. Let's get started with the review. “What are we doing Sammy?” Sunlight streams through the window, it’s noon. Delete the comma and replace it with a period. ...

I loved this! From beginning to end, it seemed fluid. The awkward pauses seemed kind of... I don't know the right word besides realistic. There were really no spelling or ...

Love this ! I really want to read more. I think the first person who posted pretty much did cover the grammatical errors. I think you did absolutely wonderful! Please ...

This story was...wow. Amazing from beginning to end. The only problem I had with it was in the beginning I thought it was being told from a girl's point of ...

Hey, sorry I haven't been on and reviewed anything, but I'm back. This is another story that I absolutely love. The thing that I recommend is to not repeat the ...

Hey, AlphaGirl here! You can probably guess what I'm going to say. Utterly fantastic! Although I did manage to catch two errors. After a few moments, I pulled gently away ...

I loved this. I especially loved the romantic aspect of it. You really showed her love for Edward and vice versa. I did spot one grammatical mistake though: Edward looked ...

Hey, Evi. I loved the ending. It's something you wouldn't have expected, but still a very good ending. Plus, I also love the way you wrote the story. It was ...

This was a very interesting story. The girl seemed to have a very good relationship with the bartender, but with the normal awkward moments you would find in their kind ...

Awesome, as usual. Thanks for the shout out by the way. You stuck with the plot you were aiming for in this one. I loved the ending, too. It seemed ...

Oh. My. GOD. That was simply amazing! You really were able to show her love for her "family" in this part and it nearly made me tear up. It was ...

That was absolutely fantastic! I definitely cannot wait to read the last two parts. You are an utterly fantastic writer and definitely should keep writing more Twilight fanfiction. You have ...

It was really good. But, I also agree with the two people who reviewed above me. It was a little long because you seemed to have posted it multiple times. ...