AliceInWonderland

Thanks so much for your reviews. I'm going to try to work with your feedback!

This is a poem inspired by a book I had to read in French class last year. The Just Ones Hands tremble over smooth leather Thousands of rough fingertips together. ...

I totally come to feel what you feel when reading this poem. But you kind of leave me wondering about the last three lines. Care to elaborate?

Lovely. I wonder how you came up with this one. What inspired you? I agree with LaurynMitchell on the second stanza. Maybe replace little with another word? All in all, ...

Wow... Eerie. Strangely, I love the way you kept repeating the lines, it gives a dark feeling to the poem. I do agree with your characters being a little flat, ...

Beautiful poem. Oh, how men burn before her gaze! They suffer so completely, That just fits. Beautiful!

Thank you so very much! I will take in your suggestions and I've always had difficulty with punctuation in my poems, so thanks for that too!

All she had was all she was gonna get, but it was not enough to get her upset. She was more then an empty believer. She had more in store ...

Most of the times it only takes one great line for me to love a poem, one line that leaves me breathless. You had that one line ;). You are ...

Probably The Resistance by Muse ... And also all the Tegan & Sar albums :D.

Hee, I'm Alicia, 17 years old and a senior in high school. Today I was just surfing on the internet, and I thought, 'Hé! Why not search for a community ...