Young Writers Society

So, while I'm not a fan of this poem, I want to be. I can see the great poem in here, and hope I can help bring it out. And ...

One of the many joys of poetry is subtly, mostly with the rhymes. The rhymes here are so sing-songey that it almost hurts. try lengthening out the phrases so that ...

Well, this took me by surprise. Congradulations, not very many things can do that! Trust me too, it was a good surprise. I like how it rambles and the whole ...

I like this a lot, I've only got one thing to pick on "Gandhi once remarked that an eye for an eye makes the whole world blind, but if we’re ...

Not much of a poem, but a ~fantastic~ raw idea. I love it. I think if you expanded on this a little it would be brilliant, just add some imagery ...

I kind of agree with Paladin...and by kind of I mean really. I think what happened here was you had a small idea and tried to make it big. Small ...

Every line has a puncuation, and a lot of the time it just seems to be detracting from it. You don't always have to have the punctuation, go through and ...

I don't really have a lot to say, I'm not that good with poetry-my mind hates critiquing these, it all requires a lot to do about what the author's thinking ...

I liked it! Bella as a vampire was awesome! The vampire pregnancy thing was weird....And I think it was an unneccessary addition to a series, it ended nicely with Eclipse. ...

Yay! chapter four is finally up! The walking cliché was back, I like how you opened the chapter. “Aren’t I always, my lovely Jessica?” he said, practically singing. Side characters ...

Hey there Day! I'm feeling rather vicious today so don't take anything I say as an opinion of the story until I actually get there ^_^. It has to be ...

Hey Saint! I'm finally getting around to critiquing this one! because he hadn’t had a hit in days. I think when you're going through a detox it'd be called "a ...

Don't take anything I say too literly, I'm scarcastic even though it doesn't work virtually. Ignore the scarcasm, things I say are worth listening to ya know. clock inch forward ...

Ello Saint! Renee stared at the twin mulch sacks with a look of sour distaste. They were innocent-looking enough; plain burlap with the company’s logo stamped in bright red, but ...

Ello Saint! I'm much obliged for this! movie scenes of people coming up to the When I first read that I said to myself "wtf?" and re-read it. It seems ...