Ali-cat

This is my first story so please tell me what you think. I sat in the corner of the classroom and got on with my work. Alone. I’ve never been ...

Hey this is really good, and i know that its meant to be an action story, but its all flowing a bit too fast because its getting hard to keep ...

This was better than your first piece, so yay! Most of your mistakes have already been pointed out, but just to remind you- * try and keep the tense the ...

I liked this it was interesting! Whats going to happen now? Are there people on the island? Is there food? Do they get rescued? I think you should have described ...

I agree with everyone else! You should add more suspense to when the plane crashes. Other than that, it has the potential to be an excellent novel.