Aley

Notebook Little one, wrapped in black swaddled close with leather strap Tell me, tell me, where was I when I was last upon your spine? I wish to see my ...

So the river one, with the praying, I really like the flow of the piece and I think the repetition works well! I think it needs to be a little ...

Ohhh, I suppose that makes sense

Now, as someone who as actually experienced poem 29, eating tomatoes off the vine, I have to say when you first mentioned sleek black hair I was thinking tomato juice. ...

Looking at some of your other poems, poem 31 feels like it's got the right rhythm and tone, but you're using a couple repeat things that sound a little trite, ...

@niteowl I talked about the swallow singing on key song and Key for you meaning the song in that particular note tone, not a physical key. XD

Oh wow, that last one is rather heartbreaking! You are always a poet, I don't care. I love you Alliyah

Aley. All you ever dreamed of was the gentle caress of my hand Love languidly tickling your pectoral giddy teases Eventually you will realize I am here, have always been ...

Rip apart my yellow chest like fireflies painting the faces of children I am the same as you see inside and out there is no mystery to what I am, ...

L imerick of Legos There is now a man made of Legos Who hears ouch wherever he goes he goes to the barn has one look forlorn for he finally ...

The Scar on the Heel of my Foot Pop Pop pop Screeeeeee ah Ah mng rrrg squish rub rub rub squish patter drip creak drip drip creak drip drip patter ...

The little red welt swells my skin itches like a son of a * crawls like worms among my veins Tell me you destroy me just wait as we dive ...

Thank you for the kind words @Alliyah

Ah! Why are there only two! I want to know more about this guy in Poem 2! Where's the rest of your NaPo? Keep going!! You still have a day!

I love the strength of the last line but "crave" feels a bit weak for it. All in all, I think the story this introduces is great and I really ...