Alarainya

This is my first attempted at a story, so I'm just warning you, it might be a bit pathetic. And this prolouge is short, but it's kind of like an ...

I liked this. It wasn't really a story, story, it was more of how someone might explain themself. I kinda write like that when I write in my journal. The ...

This chapter was ok. I have to say it was a bit......Noninformational. I don't know, but somehow this chapter wasn't as interesting as the others. I'm not quite sure why, ...

YAY YAY YAY! MORE ISAAC!!!! Sorry, but I really do like him! The only problem I have with this chapter is Carmen pushing her towards Isaac. I can definately say ...

ISAAAC!!! YAY! So, I loved that chapter. The words bonder and bondee are a bit weird, but other that that I absolutely, completely loved it. I like how she is ...

YAY! CARMEN IS GONE! (I don't know why, but I can't stand him, I think it was because of when he was mean to her in the begining.) Anyway, I ...

oh, and when I said "him" in the crit part, I meant Carmen. Just in case you're confused!

RAWR!!! WHERE IS ISAAC!!!! I WANT TO HEAR ABOUT HIM, NOT STUPID CARMEN!!! (sorry I already like him and I want him back) Now that I'm done with my little ...

I liked this chapter too, but I felt like there wasn't enough. She talks to Philip, Rebecca gets angry, and then she leaves, talks to her friend, then dreams, and ...

I liked it a lot, but I thought the begining of school thing was a lot like Twilight too. It was good though. Just be careful not to use "but" ...

I liked the last stanza too, it actually took me by suprise. I thought that the person was angry. Like, "you just listen to rumors, and don't even bother to ...

Your poem is good. Its a bit short for the subject of poem, and maybe not colorful, or descriptive enough, but I like it. It has a main idea, the ...

I liked your poem. The only thing that may have been cheesy is that almost every line rhymed...wait maybe all of them did. *scrolls to top of screen to look* ...

I liked this story very much! I like how Emma reacts the kiss. She is all happy at first, and then realizes that she didn't want it to happen. That ...

Thank you! I appreciate your crits, they are very helpful!