Alarainya

WOW. That was amazing. I couldn't understand it, and that is what made it great. There was such feeling that everything that I couldn't understand had a meaning and everything ...

That was amazing I love stories like that! You did a wonderful job! You wrote it wonderfully just give a bit more of the characters feelings and it will be ...

RAWR, I always do that! Don't mind the [i] I forgot to make it in italics...sorry!

Ok, this is the begining of a story which I absoloutly love. I thought of it one day, and have played over how it goes so many times in my ...

I liked it, but I don't really think it makes sense...If some strange guy walked by my house and said he didn't remember his name I wouldn't exactly say, "Hey ...

Very good, I have just one problem. She says, "Her big brown eyes would stop me right on the spot." Well thinking of them would too, right? If she didn't ...

All I have to say is that chapter was way too short, and now that the reader finds out more about this guy and what he did to this girl ...

Creepy, but too creepy for the begining. I know she is going to go to the party, its obvious. Thats the problem, if somebody said that to me I'd be ...

I liked this chapter a lot, but I think its weird that she gets so angry at Nora. Other than that I really liked this chapter, it was very good. ...

Thank you very much for reading it! I'm so glad you like it! Thanks. -Rhiine

Thank you very much for your crits everyone! They're very helpful! I'll work on possibly rewriting the prologue, but then again I may move on to the next chapter, we'll ...

Good job! It was very descriptive. I just wanted to say that you do get kinda confused with the dog knowing about humans, and then being seemingly confused about what ...

This is different from the other Ocean Song. It just happened that we picked the same title. I would have changed it, but it's so perfect that I had to ...

I liked it, its a bit choppy, but very cool. It was different, and kind of creepy. Just watch out for punctuation. I have to mention this, but I was ...

oops, I meant for the story to be in italics, so just ignore the little [i] I had some issues with the computer!