Alainna

I can imagine that the moon one did take some playing around with, to not get any glare etc. I really like the second and third one. They are very ...

Hey Olive and welcome to YWS! Why don't you tell us a little about yourself, what you write and any hobbies you have? If you do need anything I'm just ...

*Gets excited too* Hey Jamie and welcome to YWS!! *hands out party poppers* If you ever need anything at all - crit, chat, help - just pm me and I'll ...

Hey there! I liked elements of this but it doesn't seem.....satisfying. I want more. I want there to have been more of everything: description, emotion, facts, memories. Life. A couple ...

Hello there. Right, I did enjoy this piece and I liked the second person narrative. It could have worked in 1st or 2nd as well.....I don't think it really changes ...

JFW - I critiqued part 2 and part 3. Hope they help. Choco - I critiqued all of them and if you need more help pm me and don't hesitate ...

Hey, the final part! I don't think the ending is as weak as you believe it to be. I didn't cry so maybe that needs to become your goal. To ...

Hi Rosie, sorry that this one took so long to get round to doing - I was beyond busy yesterday and every time I went to reply to this I ...

Hola and welcome to YWS!! I have no experience in screen writing or scripts but there are several people on YWS who do....I'm sure that you'll manage to hunt them ...

Hola Story and welcome to YWS!! *hands out chocolate chip cookies* If you ever need anything at all feel free to pm me and I'll be happy to help you ...

Hi there and welcome to YWS!! *hands out party poppers* If you ever need anything at all then feel free to pm me and I'll be happy to help you ...

I am agnostic and that is down to several reasons: 1) My parents. Both my parents were brought up as Greek Orthodox Christians. My father is religious when it suits ...

Hey Rosie! These two chapters were a lot better than the prologue and I found the story a little more enticing. The mansion in which Carrie lived was out of ...

OK, so you asked me for a critique and here I am! Now, it won't be in-depth as so many other people have pointed out the major and some of ...

Heya, another good part to what is an intriguing and well thought out story. I'm really enjoying this. A few things that I caught: I think we should ask people ...