Alainna

Hiya! Erm.....I agree with magyk, some of the sentences didn't make sense. It was quite gruesome, yet in a clean , clear manner. This made it intriguing. I could see ...

8.5/10..........lol. I agree!!

This was good. I really liked the contrast used between the old and the new.....very poetic. The first verse could have been broken up into more, smaller verses so that ...

This is really good. I think you could of showed more contrast between the beautiful garden and the horrible images. A great piece, Alainna xxxxxxxx

I had to read Junk for school and I loved it. Melvin now has a new book out called 'Doing It' which is also great but not for the faint ...

I have not read Northanger Abbey however it is in my house......(Some cupboard or box in my room.......) as my sister has read it. I'll see if I can find ...

Hate to say it but............I hate this book. I got half way and thought 'I give up'. It just does nothing to keep you hooked, I understand reading it if ...

Hola and welcome to YWS!!!! I'm learning Spanish at school but I'm not that great........lol. Well, if you need anything feel free to pm me!! Alainna xxxxxxxxxxx

I didn't really find it confusing, and I'm proud of the fact that I knew that even the Doctor was part of the girls personality. The only thing is that ...

It's not too long, but some of it is a bit random..........the whole drinks thing lost my attention. I really like your characters, they are real and to the point. ...

I liked this piece and am going off to read part two right now!!! Alainna xxxxxxxxxx

You used some amazing imagery....this was really good. Love the description of the colours. Alainna xxxxxxxxxxxx

Very intriguing! I really liked the first line and the way we don't find out any names, it keeps the reader on their feet. Keep it up, this could turn ...

Thank you to those who have critiqued Part 1 and 2. Suggestions have been taken aboard. Please feel free to crit. Enjoy. Lyla. Part 3. “What?” I felt mum wrap ...

This is a very emotional and well driven piece. There are a few grammatical errors (gunna), (Question mark instead of exclamation mark.) and other spelling mistakes but these are unimportant. ...