Alainna

Ok. I think I missed the point of this piece slightly, is there more to it? You kept missing the letter 's' off the end of words. What was it ...

This was very good, I loved the last two ends the poem well. I didn't quite get this: my sweet lady friend I'm not sure that it fitted the piece... ...

It's smelly!!! What is love?

HI BOB!!! Welcome!! Alainna xxxxx

I really like this, it's meaningful. I really liked this: We think the dark is at its end, But find it finds us once again. Any chance of this being ...

Erm....you have water retention...lol. Why does lying on the grass make me happy?

Hi BoyAfraid!! Welcome to YWS!! Alainna xxxxx

I'm reading a book that hardly anyone has heard of called 'Tina Come Home' by Paul Geraghty. It's great as an easy read. Goldenheart said: Right now I'm reading a ...

I think flash backs are great for getting background info on characters. As for the time thing, try describing the change in colour of the sky, or something like that...but ...

My first real story was when I was nine. It was about an evil next door neighbour who turns out to be a witch. I remember forcing my teacher to ...

Ahh, sweet. Could there be more to this? Great work, Alainna xxxx

Wow. I LOVED this. You can relate to it, it's short and to the point, it's well written. Great stuff, Alainna xxxxxx

This was good. I think it could have flowed better though as it was a bit jumpy. Maybe having shorter sentences, but longer stanzas would work better, or simply play ...

This was great, very emotive. I like your style of writing. I can't wait for chapter 2.... Alainna xxxx

This is part 4. Crit is loved!!!! The bell at the end of the day couldn’t have been more welcome. Sarah and I pushed our way through the crowed corridor ...