Alainna

Yep, there are a few technical errors but they have already been pointed out, so I wont bother....... The poem itself was very good. It was clear and meaningful, with ...

Wow. This was great, the rhyming worked, the reader can relate, it was technically well balanced....... It got better as it went along, the beginning wasn't quite as strong as ...

Good poem, I liked it! This was great: To be cherished by an earnest eye; A treasure to which all may come by. Good rhyming!! This needs to be improved: ...

LOL!!!!!!!! Thanks for the crit Meevs............ Don't scream..........but I haven't even started part 5. This weeks just been mad! I'll let you know when i post it!! Alainna xxx

I really liked this, the meaning, the words you used. I loved this: Build a castle from grains of time we spent together To improve: You said it yourself, it's ...

As for the earlier theory of Harry being the last Horcrux; how, I ask you, can you house a sliver of soul in a body already possessed of one? You ...

I saw that to! In fact we were having this very conversation in citizenship yesterday! There is too much violence and sex in the media today. You can't even watch ...

Hi and welcome to YWS!!!! If you need anything pm me, or check out the FAQ's!! Alainna xxxxxxx

I absolutely disagree with Faith. (By the way the whole point of this site is to give constructive crit, not to patronize...) Although a hard thing to write, this is ...

I really liked this. It suited it to be short. It's the sort of poem that would brighten up your day, which is a rare form of poetry these days!!!! ...

This is horrible but true. The government (British and American) would rather spend money KILLING people, than saving people. For every 1 million pounds spent on ammunition, only 1p goes ...

How the heck did the Da Vinci Code come before To Kill A Mocking Bird? They are no where near in the same league!!! All of the Dan Brown books ...

Hi and welcome to YWS!!!!!! You'll really like it around here; it's great! Alainna----Not to be confused with Alanna who has posted above.lol. :D xxxxxxxxxx P.S. If you haven't already, ...

I agree with Mad, the one word last line could make the second stanza much better, more forceful. I really loved the first stanza, very passionate and vivid imagery. The ...

Still as emotive as before, but much better now it's longer. Repetition works well and the last line is great. This line still isn't fab, but its only my opinion: ...