Alainna

Hola Anna and welcome to YWS!!!! I'm sure you'll like it here!! We aren't that evil.... :twisted: Awwwwww...your avvie is sooo cute...I have some of those too!!! Anyways, if you ...

The idea behind this was good, and I do like the Blue and Gold thing but it didn't work as well as it could. The repetition lacked structure and therefore ...

Found it!!! I hunted this part down..... This was good, more action and a little more suspense which I like! "Yup,"Patrick... 'Rick', said, "set us up." Not to sure about ...

:D Dialouge!!! YES!!!! I liked this a lot. There is something missing though, I'm not sure what...maybe it's suspense or something. I'm not sure. But I'm positive that this will ...

Hey JC, I'm liking this, it's good that you acknowledge the fact that it's slightly cliche. I like your descriptions, the bits with the rooms were good. It was a ...

Part six finally, it's taken a while. Crit welcomed! Enjoy.. Lyla. Part 6. I walked up to the counter and waited for M to finish serving his customer. M was ...

This is great!!! You made the right move, changing the genre you write. I think you can pull it off really well. Jon is molding into a fantastic character, especially ...

Ooooh...... Argh, Luke is evil!! Robs back!!!! I loved this Meevs, I really did!!! Only thing is, if Luke wasn't gay would he really be that forward?? I mean you ...

Hello and welcome to YWS!!! If you need anything pm me!!! Hope you like it round here!!! See you around, Alainna xxxxx

I really enjoyed this part! I do have to agree with Meevs though, I'd like more information on Jon. I'm starting to like Jon and Nikki a lot. Keep up ...

I seriously thought you were pregnant! :oops: BOY!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hola Angie!!! Welcome to YWS!!!! Poetry?? If you ever need a crit just pm me (although I don't know how trustworthy my crit is when it comes to poetry!!). So, ...

I really like this Jules. I'm glad that you've started writing in a different style, it works well. Clouds were flitting over head in the strong wind, but here in ...

Hello and welcome to YWS!!! If you're still confused then check out the FAQ's; they really do help!!! See you around, Alainna xxxxxxxx

Oooh! :oops: Sorry, that was my fault. I can be dopey at times...... See ya, JC, Alainna xxxxxxx