Alainna

Sorry it took so long for me to get round to this!!! Well, most other people have said what this piece really needs so I'll just put a little bit ...

Thank you so much for all your crits! When editing I shall improve this argument, draw it out, etc. I completely agree with the comments made about that! Lyla's mum ...

Right, this section is smaller than usual. Thanks for past crits. Enjoy. :!: Lyla will not be posted after this one for around 6 weeks. Sorry!!! :!: I was walking ...

Re-write!!! Woop!! This is a little more...inspiring. It didn't make me loose all hope on Jamie. I could actually see yourself in Natalie, the writer acting as the friend to ...

Coincidence. I read the first chapter of this book yesterday as my mate is reading it and already I'm absorbed. I'm off to buy it soon... Characters flat??? No way... ...

Atheism is the way forward. Well, in my opinion... :wink: Journalism is appealing to me at the moment as well, which is why I chose Media and Sociology as my ...

Hey Lilith!! Yeah, everyone said I was like Hermione too....frizzy curly hair is never good....*hugs straighteners*. Libraries are cool if a little annoying. My local libraries don't have that great ...

Hello Flic, can I call you that or is it irritating?? Welcome to YWS!!! Well, feel free to pm me if you need anything at all and I'll be happy ...

Hi there, don't think we've met... Well, if you need a crit or anything pm me and I'll be happy to help you out!!! See ya, Alainna xxxxxxxx

Hola and welcome to the site!!! If you need anything feel free to pm me and I'll be happy to help!!! Questions..... Favourite colour? Book? Film? Genre you write? See ...

Hello Zoe and welcome to YWS!!!! Well, if you are an aspiring writer this is the place for you.... Feel free to pm me if you need anything and I'll ...

*mutters under breath about length but avoids Lucy's stare...* :D Good stuff, if a little......dry. It's like I said in my last crit....I want more expansion. Also, I'd like more ...

OK, this was good, though still rather short....but I need to stop complaining about that!!! I agree with WC13, your writing is very alluring. However, everything feels a little....spaced out ...

Okey pokey, I kinda agree with Claudette, although I think she has every right to be depressed. This chapter was a little weaker than usual but I liked the part ...

Oh my. I kinda guessed that it wasn't his baby but I never thought that this would happen.... I couldn't find any more comments rather than crit. I really love ...