Aina

Here is part two of "Out of control". Enjoy! ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ “Should we go see how Lucy is?” a voice laughed. I knew that

Thank you carelessaussie13 and Hippie for the reviews. I knew I was runnig a risk by cutting the story here, because all the action is in part two. This was ...

Hi iCarlyfan, In general I like your piece. It is somehow nice and peaceful. What disturbs me are the references to Bella's strength. As far as I can remember (I ...

This is a short story I am going to post in two parts. The title won't really explain itself until part two. Enjoy! :D _________________________________________________________________________________

I think removing the review ratio is a very good thing. At the moment I am totally confused at what it actually is. (2:1 - 3:1 - 4:1 - 5:1 ...

What I need most in a good book is aside from believable characters and a good writing style is a excellent plot. What makes me put a book aside the ...

Two things: 1. Why is this posted in scripts? 2. This is so short that I cannot do anything with it. It might be the beginning of something good, but ...

Hi GryphonFledgling, I just finished reading all five episodes in one go. I have no experience in critiquing scripts so I am going say something about the plot and characters ...

Once there was a monster who spoke only about bubble gum. He thought that he should take a lesson about bubbles and rubber bands. He could jump over the river ...

Okay writers pen, Here comes your very long review. Just so this is clear before you read this: I think your idea is good! It is your writing that needs ...

I agree with fhwdf that your story really does have a funny moral. There are a few points that disturbed me though: 1. Silver-Light is a really odd name if ...

I am adding the last paragraph of the first part so that you can understand the beginning of the second part. Since they are one chapter it is pretty hard ...

The title is only the working title. I would really appreciate it it anyone has suggestions. But you probably can't determine from this part what everything is going to be ...

I absolutely agree with Rosey. I spent weeks creating the "past" of my MC before I found the right place to start my story. But then at one point I ...

I normally take the name that first pops into my mind when thinking about the character. Then I look up the meaning so that it does not totally contradict what ...