Adnamarine

Yes, I do know what a pantoum is, but as Cade already pointed out: Ideally your lines will form sentences, not be sentences in themselves. *adna*

why thank you

I made a few changes, including the italics/bold thing. Is there anything specific that didn't make sense to you, or was it just the whole thing in general?

You're absolutely right. I would even know how to begin fixing this. I think the only reason I posted this and thought it was worth anything is because I had ...

Meggie wandered over to the counter and poured herself a fresh cup of coffee, no cream or sugar. She walked back to her desk, wrapping both her hands around the ...

I fixed Kasey, thanks. Do you think it's a sign I used to big of words that I sent people to the dictionary?

Thanks. Any other suggestions anybody?

Thanks!

Note: It makes perfect sense if you put in punctuation in the right spots: "I saw a rooster. In the mail, I saw an envelope" etc.

any other suggestions? what about the title? i'm bloody terrible with titles

Yeah, I fixed that now. THANKS!!!!!!! I'm glad you liked it:)

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Light grown dim; Dome flooded with color; She lies beside him. The child wants no other time then dawn. Lantern suspends in the sky, Shapes drawn. The nightingale sleeps, The ...

Thanks everyone. I know it's still really rough. I know it doesn't really make sense if you read it for what it is, but it's abstract, like Shafter said. I'll ...