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Re: Tristesse: Chapter 2
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Let's see what we have right here... NITPICKS: "His gaze lost into infinitely gray sky, trying his best to ignore the sorrounding classroom." Surrounding ...
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Re: Fur Feathers Scales and Stars - 1.3
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Let's see what we have right here... When I look at this, I think script! This could really make a great script! Now this ...
Aug 8, 2014 -
Re: Contemptable Wrest - (Ch. 10) Part 2: Laid to Rest
Hello! KatyaElefant here with another review(so many reviews for you today! You must feel special! :3) Oh and Happy Review Week! Let's see what we have right here... NITPICKS: “But ...
Aug 7, 2014 -
Re: Contemptable Wrest - (Ch. 10) Part 1: Laid to Rest
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Let's see what we have right here... "I would be content if we could just slow the ebb, stay its execution, salvage any scrap ...
Aug 7, 2014 -
Re: Contemptable Wrest - (Ch. 9) Part 2: Silver Underlinings
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Let's see what we have right here... NITPICKS: "I fell, fell, fell through a somethingness, pervaded by nothingness. " Before fell, you need an ...
Aug 7, 2014 -
Re: Contemptable Wrest - (Ch. 9) Part 1: Silver Underlinings
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Let's see what we have here... I think that you need to set up the setting better because I'm confused on where they are ...
Aug 6, 2014 -
Re: Contemptable Wrest - (Ch. 8) Part 2: Don't Dishonor Lotus Momma
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Let's see what we have right here... I think that you have pretty good imagery, the only problem is that you don't show how ...
Aug 6, 2014 -
Re: The Legend of He Who Endured: Prologue
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Let's see what we have right here... NITPICKS(You have a bunch of minor mistakes so I'll list them off right here): "keeping well out ...
Aug 5, 2014 -
Re: This is War; Chapter two
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Let's see what we have right here... NITPICK: "I went strait to the address, stated my worry, and they got right on it." Straight ...
Aug 5, 2014 -
Re: Halidom: Chapter 1 -- Crimson Dawn
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Let's see what we have right here. NITPICKS: "Doing my best not to trip over the masses of bodies litering the floor. Tossed in ...
Aug 3, 2014 -
Re: Ward 2N, Part 1.
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Wolf and I decided to gang up on this work and get it out of the green room(give you awesome reviews). Let's see what ...
Aug 3, 2014 -
Re: It came down to Star Wars, in the end.
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Let's see what we have here... How did this get into the spotlight and still have no reviews? 0-0 I like the way you ...
Aug 3, 2014 -
Re: A War With No End Chapter 9
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another! Let's see what we have right here... First thing that comes to mind when I saw this was, why was the main character keeping time ...
Aug 3, 2014 -
Re: A War With No End Chapter 8
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review. Let's see what we have here... I think you did a better job with imagery in this chapter but I wish I knew what ...
Aug 3, 2014 -
Re: A War With No End Chapter 7
Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Let's see what we have here... NITPICKS: " I moved the box so that the laser was pointing at the celling, and rose slightly ...
Aug 3, 2014