AdamHomer

Gina slams the door so hard the momentum causes it to swing back open giving Oscar one last brief view of the inside of her apartment. The scratched hard wood ...

David didn’t really know who this person was, yet felt the benevolence of him. He didn’t know what it was that compelled him to do so, but he followed the ...

Sweet. Now I want to call my friends to play Dungeons and Dragons. This could grow to be a cool essay. Keep the idea.

Not bad. I can see the vision and how incredible it would look with state of the art programs. Although the label and company name at the bottom strikes me ...

This being the first entry I've read in the series I thought Jessica was the narrator as well. A tad cliche, more of a journal entry. Make the bbq more ...

Incredible sense of history with Ashmore. Sense of place and size is key when crafting fictional locales. Work on internal though more though. Example. How do the 536 faces of ...

I agree with Midnight, real dialogue heavy. I am too, and it can do wonders when juxtaposed with internal thought process. Example Liam attitude toward Omar and how he actually ...

Love a women with a bit of validated rage. Also, I'm smitten with the name Stella.

If I may suggest love, Read some Raymond Carver poems. More specifically 'An Afternoon.' Your piece is reminiscent of the feel. I can smell the salt water. Sensory attack.

For your age mate, you've got good grasp on voice. You're dialogue is spot on, but could use something a bit more dynamic. Don't quit mate.

Let me start this chapter by saying my family ,on both sides, has a history of substance abuse, I've got more alcholic cousins and uncles than the Kennedy's. I have ...

First let me say i'm terribly sorry for happen to you. Good story, but a tad cliche.

pretty power imagery there Extremely cryptic, and in that mystery there is an undeniable draw This would make great prose.

[quote="salsashanno"] Tell me what you think, I'm not much of a poet so I'd like some feedback! But please who ? Is yet again the question. Are you really the ...

Just a few poems. I’d love opinion and critiques. Thanks for reading. Hedonistic Gilbert; Most of my days are spent scraping stains off pants and shirts. Hot sauce crust, Mustard ...