AardvarkSlave

When you look at me You see a good friend That’s not what I want to be But I don’t want it to end You treat me like the sun ...

If I could get another opinion of my story, it'd be great. This is the only story I've ever written where I'm willing to re-edit until it's at its peak.

Thank you! I actually edited it, so if you wanna reread it and tell me your opinion(s) again, I'd greatly appreciate it. I wrote things throughout it- not just changed ...

First, I'd like to start off by saying this made me tear up. Second, I want to say that I haven't read any critiques on this, but if you get ...

Thank you! Well, I'd first like to say that I didn't put names to the characters because I felt it'd be uncomfortable if anyone who knew us both personally read ...

There Peter sat, his hand slowly creeping towards Nem's as they sat staring at the sun creeping below the gentle waves of the ocean. A smile came over his face ...

Hey. I just want to get the basics out of the way first. I was a bit iffy about your writing style at first, but then I got used to ...

She pranced about in the field of daisies, twirling around in her homemade floral dress. Her black hair stood out from the light and colorful field as it flew in ...

Hmm, I would have enjoyed it more if you had put a little more description into maybe the setting, emotions... Anything along those lines. If you had intentionally made it ...

Screw logic, I have black hair. -- Her fingers danced upon the keys of the keyboard, the reflection of the screen in the lenses of her glasses. Beneath the black ...

I have to admit, the thing that made me click on the link to this story was because of the name, "Jubilee." It's my middle name. I'm glad I clicked ...

I thought this was a great piece. I loved the topic, since most people are afraid to write about something such as this. You, though- You were bold enough to ...

Alrighty, I made this while listening to Cat Steven's “If You Want to Sing Out”. Odd, right? Oh, right, you probably haven't read it yet. Well, anyways, I'm a very ...

You know what song goes well when reading this? Waltz For Venus Moving on... I liked this piece. It didn't drawl on and on with pointless details; I think you ...

I liked the transition of her opinions and the realism. I would immediately hate my classroom if I had to go back, too... All in all, I think its a ...