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Re: Fragile soul or Indifferent mind?
tgirly: Thanks for your honest and insightful review. My punctuation isn't something I am really proud of. But hell I'll learn I guess. It's good know that you get this ...
Jul 4, 2011 -
Re: Fragile soul or Indifferent mind?
Her waxy feathers are glazed with red blood As she struck down with sleek efficiency Limp and lifeless... Limitless she had seemed! From her throat is pulled a ghostly whisper ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Aphrodite
The poem was beautiful and deep. Aphrodite was an appropriate title. It dealt with pain in the love life. I found it gripping. However your rhyming could have been better ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Stranger
The poem was good. Actually it's pretty awesome for your age. But there are certain point's you may want to keep in mind. A full stop is not required after ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Over New York
The poem was good but a bit clumsy for me. Word's like "boobs" don't really go well with poetry according to me. Try using word's like "bosom" to make it ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: String Of Hate And Lies
Haha go easy on me! I"m just rookie. :P But yeah the next one would much better. Thanks for the comment's by the way. Helps me a lot. The poem ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Far Away and Long Ago
The poem was beautiful and struck a chord. The reader start's to dream about the long forgotten times and the magical beauty it possessed. Great work there. I don't have ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Sunshine
The poem is really sweet and strikes a chord. Your mom must be really proud. The rhyming was good. It was one of easy to read yet touching poems. But ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: String Of Hate And Lies
*Can be from the object's view too. =) You kneel on the floor tear's falling from your eyes. You've learnt to hate me along with all my lies Then why ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Conquered
The poem had a dark, rich quality which was absolutely amazing. I love the you talk about the negativity building up inside. And your ability to conquer it. The imagery ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Hanged
The poem was great. And the imagery, flawless. I loved the way it talks about temporal hell. There was a dark sickly terror in the poem which made me cling ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: The Last Night
Thanks you for review. Like said my lack punctuation can be credited to my carelessness. One of my many fault's. But yeah I'll work on it. Will work on the ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Midnight Sun: Part I
It was a beautiful poem. The imagery was flawless. And the finish touched perfection. Looking forward to the other part's. =)
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: The Last Night
Writing away: Thanks for the suggestions. All the punctuation mistakes can be credited to my carelessness. I'll make sure I don't repeat this. And thanks for complimenting it. You are ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: The Last Night
This is my first post here. Any comment's criticism will be appreciated.
Jun 30, 2011