ASingleDarkRose

This was an amazing piece of writing, but one thing that confused me was the last line. Shot Conner? Is that the guys name? I was a little confused about ...

There does need to be a bit more of a plot. Also, you should develop a little more into the mc because you don't really understand who he is or ...

Even though I'm not a fan of digimon, i think this was a very entertaining story! I wasn't bored the entire time i read it, which is always a plus. ...

Hahaha i loved this! So i'm guessing all the girls can read each others minds, and that they can all transport... or do they have individual powers too? I don't ...

This was interesting, but not very... believable. I know it's fantasy, but it's too fake. The teachers wouldn't really treat a kid like that, and no adult would try to ...

Very descriptive, but i think the reader needs to know more about the relationship between britt and lexi. why does britt hate lexi so much? It was just didn't make ...

Good development into characters! the reader really gets to know simon as a very conflicted person who doesn't want to fit in anywhere, and succeeds well. A little confusing, but ...

I thought you really developed into the characters well in this section, although i was still slightly confused. What's this whole deal with the rock? I thought that it needed ...

i was a little confused about the powers thing. I mean, how does that work? you need to explain that whole deal better. i was unsure which character had which ...

This was really good! The only thing that confused me, was who was the girl with the vines that was with luke? that i didn't get because i don't remember ...

A second later, there was a scream from the same direction, and people began to run in every directions as they panicked; Luke, confused and frightened, stayed where he was. ...

i loved your last line. I’m so sorry for your heart. it really made the poem click with me, and i agree that the jolt from the first stanza to ...

[/quote] Okay, I'm going to edit the whole thing for you... just so that i don't need to nitpick later. =) Prologue Rushing through the night , hiding from wandering ...

Hey, i have time, so i figure i'll just go through your whole thing and edit it, but i'll put it in a spoiler thing so that it doesn't take ...

i like this! im enjoying reading each chapter, but im also sort of confused about why the cat is buried in the back yard. I'm thinking the girl killed it, ...