ASingleDarkRose

Very descriptive, but i think the reader needs to know more about the relationship between britt and lexi. why does britt hate lexi so much? It was just didn't make ...

Good development into characters! the reader really gets to know simon as a very conflicted person who doesn't want to fit in anywhere, and succeeds well. A little confusing, but ...

I thought you really developed into the characters well in this section, although i was still slightly confused. What's this whole deal with the rock? I thought that it needed ...

i was a little confused about the powers thing. I mean, how does that work? you need to explain that whole deal better. i was unsure which character had which ...

This was really good! The only thing that confused me, was who was the girl with the vines that was with luke? that i didn't get because i don't remember ...

A second later, there was a scream from the same direction, and people began to run in every directions as they panicked; Luke, confused and frightened, stayed where he was. ...

i thought this had very good use of imagery! i enjoyed reading it. Always getting in my way, felt more like a horses tail. i would change the line above ...

i loved your last line. I’m so sorry for your heart. it really made the poem click with me, and i agree that the jolt from the first stanza to ...

my comment was a little confusing, so if you have questions, just pm me.

[/quote] Okay, I'm going to edit the whole thing for you... just so that i don't need to nitpick later. =) Prologue Rushing through the night , hiding from wandering ...

Aww... this was a very sweet story. i loved the way she sang him to sleep one last time, and in a way this sort of reminds me of cinderella.

I love this movie, and i thought I'd make a sort of addition to it, just cause i feel like it. i don't know if i should continue it or ...

Hey, i have time, so i figure i'll just go through your whole thing and edit it, but i'll put it in a spoiler thing so that it doesn't take ...

i like this! im enjoying reading each chapter, but im also sort of confused about why the cat is buried in the back yard. I'm thinking the girl killed it, ...

This was a good story, but i would have liked more background on maya. who was she? What exactly does it mean to be a being of light? Also, i ...