ASingleDarkRose

I will take your advice on the opening. =) I know it needs a lot of work, and yes, i have read the maximum ride series, and i didn't really ...

I really need feed back on this. I know it's not the best thing to be ever written, so please tear it apart!! ( and i know the prologue is ...

I liked this story, but i agree that the beginning was a little choppy and didn't really add to the flow. Keep writing!

This was an amazing piece of writing, but one thing that confused me was the last line. Shot Conner? Is that the guys name? I was a little confused about ...

There does need to be a bit more of a plot. Also, you should develop a little more into the mc because you don't really understand who he is or ...

Even though I'm not a fan of digimon, i think this was a very entertaining story! I wasn't bored the entire time i read it, which is always a plus. ...

actually yes, i have seen that show, that is where i got my inspiration for this writing! Yes, i will try to stay away from that.

I enjoyed reading this piece of work, and the only comment i have on it is that i was confused about who the president was. Was it Hudson or Roberts? ...

Thank you for the tips! I'm going to definitely make this better, and i hope you will review my newer copy when i'm finished with it.

Hope you like it! Really rough draft, needs a lot of editing. Work, boring. Home, monotonous. Family, dull. Friends, uninteresting. Boyfriend, slow. Now killing, that's something fun. Nothing like the

I will make sure i edit this a lot! it obviously needs it. And thanks for the ideas guys! i'm not going to really do anything with this, but i ...

Good! i'll be looking for the next chapter! i love how you explained the family at the restaurant. This chapter made me curious about beth, and i'm hoping she plays ...

I liked this story! I love when there is an antagonist that's portrayed very well, and i think you did that perfectly.

Hahaha i loved this! So i'm guessing all the girls can read each others minds, and that they can all transport... or do they have individual powers too? I don't ...

This was interesting, but not very... believable. I know it's fantasy, but it's too fake. The teachers wouldn't really treat a kid like that, and no adult would try to ...