ANate145

I like your basic idea, and how you let the reader guess what will happen, while still leaving room for suprise. With that said, on to the critiqueing. 1) I ...

This is my first piece, and I welcome any criticism. In times long past, worlds were different. Each world was in someway connected to another. These connections were no secret, ...

I like it, but as it has been said before, it's kind of repetitive. If you rearanged it, it'd be better

I think this is great! I was thinking of writing a Redwall story myself, but it looks like you could do it about three times better! I am a fan ...