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Wow, this is great, and as has been said, no extreme awkward sentance. I did notice a bit of period lack i.e. "Mrs Bell" should be Mrs. Bell, and things ...

This was a wonderful piece! I love it! It has an amazing plot(So Far :D ). Well, on to the review! I was dreaming I was wandering in the middle ...

Let the Review begin! Chapter One A foreigner Underline or bold titles. Averian Marie glanced up from her books to the large bay window facing the palaces celebrated gardens. Not ...

I'm sorry, but I don't love it. It's alright, but I just don't see a point. I bet you have something in mind, though, so just ingnore me. I woke ...

I want to try that Writers of the future.

Part two When I said shattered, I meant literally. The small house I lived in imploded, with wood shards flying everywhere. I ducked instinctively, and grabbed my little brother. Narne ...

I continue my story (Duh) Also, if anyone wants a reason for Seph Fowl to do this, I will put it in my next chapter. Chapter 2: Discovery. Artemis Fowl ...

Well I really liked it. What I really want is more character description. When the boy changes into Ink Catcher, describe what Ink Catcher looks like, also why the librarian. ...

I haven't read the original Artemis Fowl book for a while, but if my memory is correct, Artemis uses a computer to decode the fairy book. Also, just for those ...

I really liked it, and if you continue it please PM me. As has been said, a bit more descripition on the princess would help quite a bit. Also, to ...

Chapter 1: Into the mystery. Joseph was late. This was unusual. Joseph, for as long as he could remember, always was punctual. Something unusual must be going on. These were ...

Well, It's pretty hard to review. The most subjects have been touched upon. Also, on originality, you should try and placce your own twist to it. It seems just like ...

Yes, I said that as a compliment. Please don't take it the wrong way! I really liked it. I liked it very very very very very very very very much. ...

Do you want me to continue? Or should I post a rewrite of the story? Just a question.

Thank you for giving me advice. I will try to put this in my writing.