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  • Short Story » Realistic, Spiritual
    Re: . . .

    Wow. Normally, I don't read things like this and I'm more into fantasy, but this was simply amazing. The piece was very deep and franky I don't think I even ...

    Jun 26, 2016

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: The Last Light Companion [Chapter 1.2]

    Andy here, with the review I said I would make in the last chapter. As I said earlier, your writing is brilliant. It is very descriptive and engaging. It places ...

    Jun 26, 2016

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: The Last Light Companion [Chapter 1.1]

    Andy here to drop a review! Just to start this off, I couldn't seem to find the first parts of the chapter/anything before this. So assuming this is the start, ...

    Jun 26, 2016

  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Action / Adventure
    Re: Double Death Chapter 2: Willie

    Andy here from team RC. I went back and read the first chapter before I went to this one, so I had some background. Starting with the good, your writing ...

    Jun 26, 2016

  • Novel / Chapter » General, Realistic
    Re: Don't forget to say goodbye

    Hey, Andy here to try and get back into YWS. This is the first review I've written in probably a year and a half to two years, but frankly you ...

    Jun 14, 2016

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure
    Re: EXCERPT: Wealth and Riches, Chapter 1

    This is an interesting start to your novel. However, I feel like it was just a tad short. That is just a personal opinion since I tend to like longer ...

    Jun 14, 2015

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Dramatic
    Re: Shattered Crowns - Chapter One (Gregor)

    This seems like a great start! There are just a few little things. I'll just start of by saying, like Meandbooks said, writing this from a 5 year old's perspective ...

    Nov 27, 2014

  • Poetry » Politics, General
    Re: At Temple's Fall

    Great work DD! I came here to check this out after you sent me the message saying you got into the literary spotlight. :D Congratz on that by the way. ...

    Oct 29, 2014

  • Poetry » General, Other
    Re: Coconut

    Nice work! Just a little worthless nitpicks. In the third line, you say "Aroma...strong as that of a spice, but calmer." This is just a personal thing, but I would ...

    Oct 29, 2014

  • Poetry » Spiritual, General
    Re: I want to _____

    Nice! I think you've summed up the general feelings of unknown authors and poets everywhere. Great work on this! I didn't see any grammatical mistakes, but you probably want a ...

    Oct 19, 2014

  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Teen Fiction
    Re: Tomorrow - Prologue

    Hey, Andy here for a review! Ok, so I'm not even going to bother pointing out the gramatical errors the other reviewers pointed out. I'm sure you've read more than ...

    Aug 13, 2014

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Realistic
    Re: My Only Best Friend

    Holy. **** That was amazing! That story touched my heart. Great work! There were few errors, and the story protrayed the feelings of the poor main character very well. There ...

    Jul 31, 2014


  • Ok, andy here with your promised review!! This was a great chapter. It flows well, and certainly has a dramatic/spooky feel too it. It's nice that you didn't throw too ...

    Jul 30, 2014

  • Other » General, General
    Re: .

    This was pretty cool! There are just a few things that I want to mention. You've got a few gramatical issues that I figured I would point out since I ...

    Jul 29, 2014

  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, Film
    Re: The Adventures of Mary Gibbs Ch 1

    Hello! Andy here, to give a review! :D And in this strange place, you found a random user with a random review! Take this since it's not safe to leave ...

    Jul 29, 2014


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