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This is a new story i've started. i need some reviews, although its not very long. i just want to know if its as good as my friends say it ...

nice work. i couldn't get a lot of discription of the characters, so there wasn't much of a feel. there were some grammer mistakes, but i hate correcting that kind ...

well i think the palm is little squished...who am i kidding it looked like a baby's hand with those Halloween witch fingers jammed on the orginal fingers. the shading would ...

not completely. try transfuring it onto nonlined paper and shade it some more. or color it, whichever you prefer. the line structure is great, but it gets little confusing in ...

Okay i'm just going to start off by say..... THIS WAS NOT AS BAD AS YOU THOUGHT IT WAS! i loved it. if only there were a million different ways ...

well, it's not perfect-but it could be! i mean yeah so its a little choppy and there is like no discription whatsoever, but i kind of like the thilling bang ...

5:25 PM Year 6021 Rune City “Alright, take this to this address and you’re done. Just lock up when you come back.” Tidus said handing Shiva a wrapped package with ...

there were a few mis-spelled words in your story, but other than that it was amazing! you could have explained why Maria was "Dinner's" lover. once again it was truelly ...

okay, so what is Onia Corp, where is it. who is this person, is it male or female, how old was he/she at the time of the incident, more detail ...

well i won't lie to you, it was a little confusing and needs some work. it was really hard to grasp that he was a child, onl seven. i have ...

okay, basically you repeated the same thing over and over again...and over and over and over and over. it got a little annoying though. the way you wrote things over ...

it was really good, except you were missing some commas and sometimes the dialogue got a little too FANCY PANTS. FWI, if your audience is teens, add a little tood ...

nice work, try shading it more...i know you're probably like: How am i supossed to shade it with ink?!!! have you ever heard of cross hatching, or speckling, or freckling. ...

Prologue… In the year 6000 there was a runaway bride by the name Secrett Lockhart. Lucas, her husband to be, took over the Craccian Empire as a dictator and killed ...

hey there! i've made it smaller, feel free to review now!