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  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Life is just too hard

    When life is just too hard When the world just moves too slow It’s the releasement It’s the only thing I know It’s the lending hand That tells me where ...

    Aug 5, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Lonely nights

    I don't think the last two comments do this poem justice! I thought this was excellent! I have no critiques but I loved it and thought it was magical and ...

    Aug 1, 2008
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Jenna

    Excellent piece! I'm hooked! My only suggestion (besides what Brad pointed out) is this quote here. "How did Jenna know all this? Because she was wise." Although we do need ...

    Jul 23, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Suicide

    Face to the sky He inhales a final breath Then, he tumbled from the bridge Ready to accept his death Face to the sky He lets out his last breath ...

    Jul 21, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Words from my heart

    Absolutely wonderful. It's a little heart-breaking, only because I'm feeling that right now. Its completely fantastic and your wording was incredible. You captured exactly what I want to say to ...

    Jul 13, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Somewhere

    Alright, so I changed a lot and made it all rhyme, and I edited some verses to make them clearer. I aslo added in a couple new stanzas which I ...

    Jul 13, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Lies

    What if there were no lies? What if every word spoken had to be the truth? What if promises could never be broken? What if the first love lasted forever? ...

    Jul 10, 2008
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: She

    I really love this character, and now you need to find a story to put her in. You have many wonderful descriptions, and I'd love to see those dispersed throughout ...

    Jul 10, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Plaintively Gray

    This is really excellent. You have great word choice, and a great story. I cant wait to see more.

    Jul 5, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: On my mind

    Yes, i see what your getting at. But it left me feeling a little confused. A little refinement could make this a great piece though!

    Jul 5, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Electricity Storm

    I like this a lot; its very different and unique. One of a kind, which is excellent. Wonderful word choice, and its a great two-sided story. I dont know what ...

    Jul 5, 2008
  • Lyric Poetry Re: A diagnosis

    That was incredible. The way you used so many marvelous words in such a small space was great. The image you created was something i could really relate to, and ...

    Jul 5, 2008
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Escape

    When I wrote in the beginning that the water was only ankle deep, and the MC imagined their bodies in the water, I hoped it created the picture that they ...

    Jun 28, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Somewhere

    Somewhere in the sunshine A little girl sits, waiting And somewhere in the rain A mother cries out, praying Somewhere in the darkness A father is crying And somewhere in ...

    Jun 25, 2008
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Dust to Dust.

    I thought this was fantastic. I dont have a single critic. Marvelous. Excellent word choice, and I can really feel the pressence and hear the conversation. Its a wonderful new ...

    Jun 25, 2008


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