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21WhiteRoses

  • Fantasy Novels Re: Ellora/Chapter 3

    I woke up suddenly, the way one might wake after They dreamt of falling. I felt dizzy as I slid out of the bed and looked about the same room ...

    Dec 24, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: To See Sound.

    This is awesome! I really love the concept. It would be so dull to live in a world without music. Although i guess it would be kinda fun playing music ...

    Dec 20, 2011
  • Science-Fiction Short Stories Re: The Reincarnation of Wolfgang Amadeus Mozart

    This is really great! I'm a big fan of Mozart and I would rock if he was really reincarnated! I thought this story was really clever and it captured my ...

    Dec 15, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Novels Re: What a lovely way to burn - Prologue + Chapter 1

    Wonderful! I really like the voice in this. It really makes me want to read more!

    Dec 15, 2011
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Recruited: Chapter One Take 2

    This is pretty good! I really love the characters and their brotherly love. Also your descriptions are so vivid! I feel like I am out their with them! I really ...

    Dec 5, 2011
  • Science-Fiction Novels Re: Forty Degrees Celsium - Chapter 2 1/2

    your writing just blows my mind! I'm really loving this novel so far. I wanna know what happens next! My novel is really rather puny next to this haha!I adore ...

    Dec 5, 2011
  • Science-Fiction Novels Re: Forty Degrees Celsium - Chapter 1

    Wow I can tell you really put a lot of work into this. you really have a natural talent! I loved this story from the very first sentence!Your word choice ...

    Dec 5, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: The Testimony of a Roman Centurion

    This is awesome! Its very powerful and deep. Your word choice and sentence fluency is wonderful! I wish I could write like this! I would really love to read your ...

    Dec 4, 2011
  • Fanfiction Novels Re: A Legend's Path

    This is pretty good! I like how when you read it you aren't too sure whats going on. Mystery is a big plus in stories! The only grammar problems I ...

    Dec 2, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Limerick 1

    I really like this! Wish I was any good at poetry, but frankly I stink at it. This is great though! Keep at 'em!

    Nov 29, 2011
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Ellora/ Chapter 2

    When I opened my eyes again, perhaps an hour later, I was in a soft bed. The moon glimmered brightly through the windows. Risk was sitting at the side of ...

    Nov 29, 2011
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Avelyn and John- Extract from my NaNo 2011

    "Shhh... Let's go fall in love with fate, John." < Wow I really loved that line! This is a really wonderful peace! I love the feeling this couple creates. Very ...

    Nov 28, 2011
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Kalu, Newborn Spirit

    This is really wonderful! I like the concept a lot. Its so simple yet magical. Keep up the great work!

    Nov 21, 2011
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Blood Red Skies

    This is pretty good! There are a few grammar errors and a spot or two where the sentences could flow better. Aside from that its great! One thing you could ...

    Nov 21, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: You, the essence of my praise

    This is really great! Your word choice and sentence fluency is wonderful. You also set a very good mood to the poem. Great work! Keep writing!

    Nov 21, 2011


i could be a morning person if morning happened around noon.
— Fern