2019aquarious

This is kind of an intro to the next part of the story which is sort of dystopianish, so i might get somewhere in the relm of post apocalyspe later.

I am glad you enjoyed. For some clarity a couple of choices about the character Aaron is a little inserferable to an outside veiw, but from the inside, he is ...

They only spent like an hour and a half at the party and since dinner party's usually start like later and stuff it was only later 8 or 7:30 when ...

Also they are out at a restaurant because Sam does not want to be home, and also does not want to socialize and pretend to be happy, to Jebediah has ...

I understand some of your confusion. Let me explain. First of all, the reason they split up at the party is because these are Sam's freinds, and not jebediah's. Jebediah ...

Thanks for the comment. I totally understand the long wait inbetween, I have a lot going on during my days. I loved the feed back, will post chapter two soon.

Thanks for the advice. I am still working one editing.

Hey Alex, I did some editing and fixed some of the things you suggested. Most of the edits are in the second half after the little dash page break.

Thanks for this! This helps a lot!

Honestly, if you have any ideas on how to make Sam a character full of more depth other than just existing, I am unsure how to fix that. lol.

Thanks for your review, it was very detailed and helped me in editing. I think things will become more clear as the story continues.

I revised part of the story using some of your advise.

It's not about it being the best work, although I think it pretty good. This has so much emotion. What is the background behind this, how did this person die. ...

Thank You!

Thanks