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Well first of all I think that you need to split it up into smaller parts. Also I didn't get it at the beginning, and to be honest I really ...

I really like these kind of stories. The only thing that I would improve is how descriptive some of the story is. In the beginning when you mention the boy, ...

I think you really have a way with words because from the moment i started reading was hooked like i wanted to know what was happening. I really think that ...

Chapter 2 I woke up the next morning with sunlight flooding my room. I went out into the kitchen and saw that my mom was already up making eggs for ...

I think that you need to slow down and take the time and draw a picture when you write. You jump from place to place as if we knew what ...

All I have to say is that this story grabbed me. I read the beginning and got sucked into it because I love stories about the end of the world. ...

I want to hear more.

I liked the beginning because it kept me wondering what was happening. You should continue to keep the people wondering what was going on instead of just bringing it out ...

Prologue The king scratched his head in his study. The candle to his right was fading slowly, and the night began to grow cold. Suddenly, there was a loud knock ...