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Re: Take A Walk With Me, Dad.
Thanks so much everybody! I edited it a little bit, and changed the title - I hope it's better!
Jan 31, 2011 -
Re: Take A Walk With Me, Dad.
He said, “Walk with me, Dad” So we walked. It was dark out there - no stars, no moon. There were lights, though: hazy, flickering ones. Vague smears - Modern ...
Jan 19, 2011 -
Re: Pink Flower
I like it but the petals look a bit...too edited. I love the cropping and the leaves, however. Nice work, and pretty flower :) I don't know much about reviewing ...
Jul 2, 2010 -
Re: Voices (edited)
Hey guys this is a story I posted a very long time ago, but I recently dug YWS back out and decided to finally put the extremely helpful reviews (thank ...
Jul 2, 2010 -
Re: Everyday
Hey spy0h, nice poem! Just a quick reminder before I review, that every post you make you are advised to make 2 reviews. Just something that keeps YWS in check. ...
Jul 2, 2010 -
Re: The Truth
Hey pigeon3 nice poem :) Well, the topic isn't exactly nice... but I really liked it! So here's my feedback: Surrounded by noise And movement And people I can pretend ...
Jul 2, 2010 -
Re: Bathing In The Moonlight
Hey guys, just to let you know, I posted a revised version of this poem a long time ago at this location: It's still not perfect, but if you'd like ...
Jul 2, 2010 -
Re: Voices
i hope u liked it!!
Jul 23, 2009 -
Re: Voices
VOICES I reached my hand out to the dusty crank, turning it as the sound of our ancient car windows squeaked their way down. A dusty breeze trickled into the ...
Jul 23, 2009 -
Re: Nothing To Wish For
Nothing To Wish For My mother said I should never escape From our house after dark because you never know who or what might be prowling around… but out in ...
Jul 23, 2009 -
Re: Bathing In The Moonlight
Thank you! I changed what you thought I should Amber!
Jun 6, 2008 -
Re: Bathing In The Moonlight
Bathing In The Moonlight My mother said I should never leave the house after dark because you never know what might be out there… but out in the darkness is ...
May 8, 2008 -
Re: Chapter 1: Small, Consolidated Life
Thanks for all the great tips everybody...I'll put them to use!! :D
Apr 21, 2008 -
Re: Chapter 1: Small, Consolidated Life
Water. It’s one of those mysterious things you never really know much about. “Sure” You say. “I know tons about water.” Then, you proceed in telling me that “it’s wet, ...
Dec 3, 2007
