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Apart from the last three lines(they honestly just didn't fit) this poem was great. I like the cut off sentences, it gave it someone, what I'm not sure. I like ...

Honestly, I wasn't a great fan of it. It confused me. The rhythm was also really off and inconsistent. I found the first paragraph really difficult to read because of ...

Well I must say I wasn't explacting that ending. That was great how you twisted from something happy and normal to something upsetting and depressing because that's how real life ...