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Re: (the smell of Fear, now): The Shadow.
I liked the idea of this piece. However, I noticed a few mistakes: 1. I notcied in the second parapgraph, you quickly changed point of view. From the man to ...
Jan 20, 2006 -
Re: The steps to Heaven
The title, The steps on the Stairway to Heaven Is far to long (seven words), It doesn't really sound right. usually a title is no more then six words, even ...
Jan 19, 2006 -
Re: A New Sun Has Risen
Johann passed a note to his classmate behind him. “Psst,” he whispered, “Give this to Sieglinde.” Johann pretended to read his book. He gulped and loosened the tightness of his ...
Jan 18, 2006