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Hi there! Not many comments on this... just a few grammar mistakes: Moving on is hard to do but I've got to I wish you knew the pain you caused ...

O.O I liked this! It had a moral behind it and in the beginning it sound a little like little Red Riding Hood! :D Well, my way home is always ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! Yes you should indeed break it up. I'm sorry to say I couldn't read it all. I got so tired for only looking at the ...

Well, JFW1415 has pratically said everything. it's a bit short to have a good critique. I liked it. I liked how it seemed that it was the voice (narrator) was ...

Loved it! You (or the artistic character) were so sad about the betrayal. I could feel the emotions and it had a little bit of fun. Because the tables finally ...

don't know what to say.... I liked the theme and how it was like you were directly talking to someone.... But it kindda is something to just read and... well ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! You might not be very good right now, but you'll improve. LOL Anyway, I liked it. Good story line and description, but as Princess has ...

WOW O.O very deep... Love it! :D How depressing it is... I completely understand you! :D I didn't find any grammar mistakes. Some people might say that as you changed ...

Very good! It has a good flow, eve n if it sounds a bit monotonous. I didn't find any mistakes, but still something could slip. I could see the feelings ...

LOL You're right! xD Anyway, it's your story and you do as you like! :D

hey there! I liked this. i think you should post all the story like when and how they met, how they fell in love. You should give a more detailed ...

Hi! As Cat has said welcome to YWS! (short time ago she was saying it to me LOL) Anyway, I liked it! :D it cute and straight to the point. ...

I liked this idea. The definitions to start where a good touch. I liked her point of view, Lauren. The girls at school always gossiping and inventing rumours (I honestly ...

I don't know how this works... So I'll just put my character right here (if it isn't this way I'm sorry) Name: Nicole Lia Norwood Age: 17 Gender: Female Grade: ...

LOL I agree with you! he made a reasonably good review! There must be something wrong... Anyway, I liked it. I think you described it well because I think (and ...