lexieells
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lexieells No problem! Hope it was helpful and not too harsh!!
Jul 23, 2011
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lexieells I've been asked to write an article for a magazine. I'm excited but it will be my first published works. You seem to be very intelligent, specifically in the particular catagory of writing. So I was just wondering if there were any specific topics that you feel would make exceptional pieces or if you had any tips and words of wisdom you could lend me. I understand if you don't have time. Don't worry about it. But if you do, please feel free to PM me. Thank you so much!
-Lexi
Jul 21, 2011
Lumi I really have no idea! But we have a forum for this sort of thing! Check out the Ask An Expert forum, and I'm sure someone will have some tips!
Jul 21, 2011
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I like what you've done with it. It feels much more personal and natural to me now. More importantly, do you like it better?
lexieells i do. i feel more of an emmotional connection, whereas before, i was trying to make it something that other could relate to. however, throughout the process of correcting i've actually learned that if it's natural and true to you, others will be able to make it work for themselves. at least in my opinion.
thanks for all your help. i'll be sure to kep up on all of your work.
-Lexi
Jul 21, 2011
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Hey Thanks for the review. I would love to hear what you took away from the poem. It's always really helpful (and interesting) to see how someone else interpreted the writing.
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Thanks for the comment Who knows, maybe some day I might even write a song.
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everyone chack out the new poem i just wrote...its called passionately. its under....narrative poetry. review review review! please! and thank you(: good day
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Thank you for commenting back on my review, but it was more of a fluke on my part that actually brought me back to your poem, so I may never have gotten your remark. That being said, if I review any of your work from this point on, feel free to message me on my wall or send me a PM about it. I like it when people talk to me about their pieces ^_^, or more generally, what they may not like about my reviews.
But, and this is a big but, you should know that when I critique poetry, I always critique it under the same pretenses. Doesn't mean I don't like the poem in itself, just that when I read the poem, there were strength flaws and, being me, I pointed them out.
I can't say I'm a true Potter fan. I never was nor will ever be, seeing as the reading material is targeted for young adults and I'm.. well, pretty much past that section in life. But I will say, as an unbiased and completely honest opinion, that I wanted to see a little more from the piece than just you quoting what Harry Potter did for you. The big picture gets lost in the quotations. The idea, in all its strength (which is a good one), almost gets swamped out. It does not take a Potter fan to understand how a book can be an escape, and I would rather not be classified as unknowning as I have read the books.
So I suppose, what I really wanted to say was that it is nice to see you defending your work, but don't be ignorant to change. Its not that you are wrong. Just that the opinions I gave were exactly that. Opinions. And I meant no ill for saying them. So please don't take anything I said to heart. It was said to show you what you may not have gotten from someone who knows you and does not wish to mess around with your feelings at all.
I'm sorry if I came across as blunt. Its not in my nature to be as such, but my critiques are all pretty much to that length and severity.
~Walker
lexieells Thanks for the explanation. And I didnt mean to come across as "ignorant to change". I was simply explaining why I would rather not change it in hopes that you would understand. I am greatful for your opinions and suggestions and, trust me, I do seriousl consider them... but as any poet, I choose to leave my work as is because I feel that it explains my emotion for the topic correctly. I
However, I have considered writing a new poem that expresses my love for books and what they can help you through in life. I do believe that this would be a good piece of work. But at the same time, I feel that the Harry Potter related poem should be left alone.
Thanks, once again, for all of your critque. Please feel free to review any other pieces I post, I'd really enjoy hearing what you have to say.
-Lexi
Jul 15, 2011
Dreamwalker That's totally fine ^_^. Seeing as I'm not generally a poet, I take to advice like a moth to flame. Anyway I can get better, I strive for. Your poem was interesting and it was unique to yourself, so I definitely respect that. I just hate coming across as being rude and I fear that even in my explanation, I did just that xP.
So keep writing and I'll keep reviewing!
Jul 16, 2011
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lexieells same to you!
Jul 15, 2011
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welcome to YWS, after reading your harry potter piece, I have to say I'm a fan!
lexieells thanks so much!
Jul 15, 2011
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Hey! I liked your poem 'Tribute to Harry Potter'. I'm also a hug fan of the series and I even wrote a Fan-fiction story based on it. Would you like to check it out?
thanks for the review!
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Nov 10, 2011