A/N: I wrote this during English class because I was bored and felt the need to write something. I realize that it needs a lot of help and any would be appreciated Btw, the part in red, should I keep it or replace it with something else?
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His smile is like the forest ground,
crisp and beautiful on top,
but deeper down,
rotten and dead.
She trusts him, loves him
with a feeling that makes her heart feel blown up and full,
still a tiny clover of doubt hides.
Fists stain her skin red, purple, blue, green, yellow,
an artist's palet dyed into her flesh-
and he smiles, preaches with a delicate voice
about pride and shame and what is right and what is wrong.
Her heart begins to deflate,
confused, worried thoughts spin dizzily through her head
and she tries, tries so hard to
make it better, fix it again.
He's God and the Devil all wrapped into one.
A pretty-faced demon in disguise,
hiding something vile, ugly, dark
behind shiny black hair and flawless skin
Bruises flower up her arms and legs,
tattoos of "What's right for you, you know I love you"
but she slides on a mask of
tight closed lipped smiles and glazed eyes.
He doesn't discriminate,
hits armslegschestfaceback, everything
till it's branded with his touch, proof that's it's his
and she loses herself.
She;s a good student,
because she learns,
soft-spoken lies make their way out of her mouth,
unwilling
And the teacher is gifted at deception too,
beautiful blue eyes wide and caring,
his lips pepper her
in sweet nothings and half-hearted apologies.
He seems sincere, truly worried,
and her heart beats in hope
but she blinks
and it must have been a trick of the light.
Out comes that smile, those dimples,
and out comes those clenched, angry fists
and she remembers her first lesson,
Hate the lovely.
What do you think? I don't know if I like the title. I always figure out the title of a poem after I finish it but I'm not sure if I like it...thoughts?
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