I decided to redo the story. Doshiko'jans are now the Lycerians. Grishka is a character but no longer an MC. Tell me what you think. I'm still trying to find a new title for it and still open to suggestions.
Stella packed the few possessions the Torhsen army allowed her to carry in her small bag, before turning around to check her appearance in the mirror. Staring back at her was pale young man with close cropped brown hair and ocean blue eyes. He wore a set of deep red robes that only mages of the highest caliber were permitted to wear. Stella was extremely glad for having a small chest, making it easier to hide her sex under the baggy robes. She attached a scabbard to her belt, and slid her short sword into it with barely a whisper of steel on leather.
A heavy knock came at the door, nearly making her yelp in surprise. She took a calming breath and walked the two steps to the door and opened it. A soldier, a boy not quite in his second decade of life stood there with his fist raised to knock again. “What do you need?” Stella asked the boy, using her magic to make her voice sound more like a man’s.
“Capt’n sent me to tell you we’re ready to move out,’ the young man squeaked out, keeping his eyes lowered to the ground. “He also wishes to convey his wishes that you hurry up so we may begin the day’s march.” Stella rolled her eyes, knowing that the boy probably gave a much nicer version of what Captain Ferrous said, for fear of bringing her wrath on his head. She knew Ferrous was a man who didn’t like disobedience, but as a mage, Stella could get away with almost anything as long as it wasn’t treason, so every now and then she liked to push his buttons.
“You can tell the Captain I will be out there shortly after I finished packing,” Stella said before shutting the door in the boy’s face. She waited till she heard his boots move down the hall and out of hearing before grabbing her already packed bag, and throwing her hood over her head. With a small gesture of her hand, all the candles in the room flickered out and the door opened for her on its own.
The inn that Stella had made the Captain stop at was nice, and owned by a kind elderly couple. They weren’t to happy about playing host to a unit, but after Stella had handed them a bag with exactly one hundred Stratos in it, they went about preparing a nice meal for everyone, and provided good accommodations for Stella, Captain Ferrous, and a few of the senior officers.
“About bloody time, mage!” Captain Ferrous yelled, as Stella walked out of the inn, thanking the owners for their hospitality. The sun was barely beginning to peak over the tall trees of the Terran Forest. Captain Ferrous stood at the front of the column, sitting on his black horse, chest stuck out and chin held high. He was the perfect image for any military captain: clean shaven, closely cropped hair, the steel plates on his leather armor shining in the morning light, and he physique of a man who could take on a bear. “When I say we are to move out at dawn, you better be fucking packed and ready an hour before.”
“And if you wish for me to remain in the service of your unit, I would suggest you keep your tone down with me,” Stella retorted coldly. She could see a muscle twitch in his cheek at her insubordination, but he knew he could do nothing about it. “I need my sleep. If I don’t get it, I’m headquarters would love to hear my complaints, and move to another unit.” Stella looked over at the rising sun and said, “I believe it’s time we move out, Captain.”
Stella gave a sharp whistle, and a pure white horse wearing an equally white saddle trotted up to her and nuzzled her gently. “Hey there, Blanche,” she said, rubbing the horse’s nose and handing him a sugar cube. With a quick practiced motion, she climbed onto the saddle. She glanced over at Captain Ferrous who only answered with a glare before giving the order to march.
Like most marches, it was long and dull, or at least so Stella thought. Captian Ferrous was enjoying himself, turning around every now and then to yell at some foot soldier for falling behind or taking too long of drink from a canteen that went around. He never said anything to Stella, but whenever he thought she wouldn’t notice, he would glare at her.
They traveled along a wide winding path weaved its way between trees that were wide than four men, the tree branches reached out to each other from either side of the path, their leaves barely letting in enough light to make it dim, even at the height of the day. A few times Stella had to summon one of her blue specter lights so their horses didn’t break their legs on a root.
It was easy to tell when night was beginning to descend, because soon no one could see anything except whatever light Stella’s blue specter light provided. About an hour after Stella was sure when the sun had actually set, did Captain Ferrous call for a stop. Almost instantly the soldiers began making camping. Some went off to prepare food, others to set up camp, and the last few started the first watch.
And that’s when the attack came.
It started off silent. A man stumbled up to Stella, his eyes wide. At first she thought he was drunk, until he collapsed face first into the dirt, a throwing dagger sticking out of the middle of his back. “We’re under attack!” Stella yelled, summoning magic to so she could let loose a blast at a seconds notice.
“What is the meaning of this?” Captain yelled coming up, but stopped short when he saw the body. “To arms, everyone to arms! We’re under attack!” Stella heard the sound of swords being drawn, but knew it was too late when she at least twenty wolf-like figures emerge from the darkness between the trees. Twenty soldiers fell before they had a chance to defend themselves.
Stella knew they were under attack by Lycerians, a wolf-like race who walked on two legs and fought with claw, teeth, and blade. They were savage monsters, and a feared by all Torshens. Stella watched, as if in slow motion, as a Lycerian ran at her. His fur was a dark brown and he wore nothing but a dark green cloak and a belt with a scabbard for the short sword in his hand. Stella loosed a ball of blue-white fire, striking him in the chest, killing him instantly. When the ball exploded it released a shock-wave strong enough to knock three more Lycerians off their feet.
Drawing her sword, Stella blocked a cut at her neck, a returned the strike with magic-assisted strength and speed, slicing open the Lycerian’s neck to the bone. Suddenly, Stella felt a sharp pain in her back; she looked down to see a sword sticking out of her right shoulder. It was slowly withdrawn, and before she could turn around a heavy object slammed against the back of her neck. Just before Stella lost consciousness, she realized that she was going to die.
Stella woke with a gasp of air. She was lying on her side, hands tied behind her back. She nearly cried in relief. She was alive, and well except for the sharp, burning pain in her gut. At first she though it was from being stabbed, until she remembered she was stabbed in the shoulder, not the stomach. Looking down, she saw her lower robes were soaked, but thanks to their color, she didn’t know if it was blood or something else.
Her first thought was escape, so with an effort of will, she released a small amount of magic that would destroy the bindings. Nothing. In frustration, she released enough magic to level a small building, but only got the same result as before.
A small chuckling growl came from behind her. If it wasn’t for the fact that she was bound and could barely move, she would’ve jumped out of her skin. She looked up to see a Lycerian standing over her. His fur was completely black, except for a white patch resting between two amber orbs. He wore nothing but the dark green cloak and belt that held the scabbard for his short sword, which, thankfully was still in it. At first she thought he was having a coughing fit till she saw, by the wolfish grin on his face, that he was laughing at her.
“You awake,” the wolf said in horrible Torshen, mostly accented with deep growling. “Cashka stone stop your death magic.” He said indicating to whatever was binding Stella’s hands.
Stella cursed at not realizing earlier that she was being bond with Cashka stone handcuffs. Cashka stones were an infamous tool used by the Lycerians. They could absorb large amounts of magic, rendering even a High Mage, whose talents made them more of a demi-god than human, a mere mortal.
“You are female,” the wolf said, not as a question, but as a statement of fact. “You are in your moon bleed.” Stella took a second to wonder what he meant, but blushed in anger and embarrassment. She realized that it was blood on her robes, just not from a stab. She moaned in pain as a cramp racked her gut, as if to answer. She forgot how much it pained hurt, and realized that after being handcuffed with a Cashka stones, that what magic she used to suppress was now gone. She let out another moan as it made up for the time she had it suppressed.
The wolf turned around. “You are now a prisoner of Lyceria,” he said. “Try to escape, and we will kill you.” He walked away, stopping only talk to a brown furred wolf who Stella hadn’t noticed earlier. After a few quick growls in what Stella could only assume was the Lycerian language, the black wolf walked away, and the brown wolf made his way to Stella.
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