<I wrote this short story for the contest Tear Jerker song. It ends on the 14 so if you are going to review review now! The song that I followed is Coat of Many Colors by Dolly Parton. I want nitpicks, but also want reviews on the content. Does it make sense to you?>
Freshly picked pumpkins sat about me, tangled in their vines, on our worn front porch. I picked at the peeling red paint on the steps; the cold breeze made goose bumps run up my legs. I stood up as my momma walked out, letting the screen door slam behind her. She held the tin lantern in one hand and took mine in the other; we wouldn’t get back until after dark.
Momma’s hands were warm and callused, but at the same time, soft; I always felt cozy and comforted when she held my hand like she did now. As we walked, we talked about all sorts of things. This was my favorite time, when Momma and I would walk to the barns every night to do chores; not even the evenings we sewed together were as special.
“Momma,” I asked. “Does daddy live here?” Back then I didn’t realize that he often traveled to find work and when he could come home he came long after I went to bed and left hours before my mother or me even got up. When I did see him seemed years apart to me though it really wasn’t more than a week of absence. I used to cry in his closet wrapping myself in his shirts. All I wanted was a hug or a kiss or his laugh.
“He’s looking for work honey. Times are hard; there isn’t much of it around.”
“Do you see him?”
“Yes,” she smiled at my innocent question. “He misses you a lot and gives you a kiss each morning before he leaves.” My eyes were brimming with tears by now. I wanted to give him a kiss back. I wanted to get a sip out of his coffee -Momma didn’t approve, but he always snuck some to me. I remembered when he would crouch down when he got home from work and I would run to his arms so he could scoop me up. He used to come with us when we did the chores.
“Tell him I give him a big hug.” I spread my arms wide.
“How big?” I stretch them as far as they will go. In my head I think. I plan. Tonight I will stay up until he comes home, then I will give him the hug myself.
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That evening when we walked up the steps of our front porch, even with the lantern held out in front of us, we almost stumbled over a wooden box. We brought the box inside and looked for some sort of note, but there was none. So my momma carried into the kitchen and undid the latches to open it up. I gasped when I saw them. They were nothing more than rags, but they were beautiful in my eyes. The colors were faded, the edges frayed, each one small and humble. All I could think was that someone out there gave these to us and didn’t even ask for thanks. They didn’t want credit for their gift. They just gave.
I admired every piece as my momma took it out, touching all the different textures. We placed them all in neat little piles on the worn kitchen table under our only electric light. The whole time at the back of my mind I wondered who it could be. I didn’t find out that night but, at the very bottom of the box there was a note. I waited patiently as my mother slowly sounded out the words: For the girl. It was the first night in a long time since my momma laughed. She laughed out of happiness until she was forced to slide against the wall to the floor. She laughed until she cried. Her chortle made me snicker and we both sat there hugging our stomachs unable to stop.
Finally Momma stopped. After a few moments I recovered too, but I still had to stifle a few giggles.
“Well, the note says they are for you, Jo. What would you like to do with them?” My first thought was my bare arms that always seemed to be ice cold. I rubbed them as I thought.
“A coat?” I asked.
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That night -- and many nights to come -- we stayed up late sewing. The crackling birch wood fire gave us light and warmth. Momma would sew the pieces together with her little even stitches, and I would embroider decorations on them. As we sewed we told stories. I would spin wild tales of fairies, princesses, and magical animals. They were all very different, except for the ending; a young girl would always fall in love with a handsome young man. Through many hardships they would marry and live happily ever after. Momma would tell all sorts of stories too, but most of them were about her childhood or a man named Jesus.
I didn’t know how many nights we worked on the jacket, but the ones when I fell asleep to my parent’s whispering voices always have stuck out in my mind. Days passed then weeks. Before I knew it the jacket was finished. That last evening my mother told me of a boy named Joseph.
Joseph had lots of brothers, but the brothers were jealous of him because he had a coat with lots of colors. They threw him in a pit and sold him into slavery, telling their father that Joseph was dead. Joseph’s new masters brought him to a new land he had never seen. But he worked hard and God helped him. Soon he became second in command next to the Pharaoh. God told Joseph that a drought was coming, so Joseph had the kingdom prepare for it. When the drought came, the countries around Egypt started to starve, so they asked for help. Joseph’s brothers came to ask for help, too. But, instead of being angry, Joseph helped them.
After Momma finished the story, she was silent while she sewed the last stitches. She held it up in the air and gave it a good long look. “Done.” But she still didn’t let me put it on. “Not until tomorrow before school. For good luck.” That night I remember lying awake thinking about it, how beautiful it was, how wonderful, how precious. I wished that Daddy could see me wear it for the first time and I gave a silent promise I would show it off the next time I saw him. The next morning I woke up early. It was really the first day of winter because frost was in the corners of my room. The air was freezing and hung about me like a garland on a Christmas tree. I ran to my mother’s bed and shook her awake.
My excitement could not be contained. Today was my first day of school. Momma had already taught me a lot of reading, writing, and some math, but today I would learn from a teacher. My mother humored me. She got up and dressed even though it was much too early to actually go. She helped me make my breakfast and put it in my lunch pail. Then I changed into my britches, and got my shoes on. Momma pulled my dark brown hair, “So they can see your face,” she whispered. Finally she brought out my coat. She put it on me even though I was quite old enough to do it myself. She zipped it up all the way to my chin, then stepped back. Everything was patched, but I didn’t feel poor. I felt like I was the richest girl in the world. “I hope that, like Joseph, this coat of many colors will bring you hope and happiness even through the toughest times.” She leaned down and kissed the collar. Then we hitched up the horses and drove to town.
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When I entered the playground, almost all the students were there, playing and laughing together. I remember wondering how they all knew each other. Some boys were pushing the Merry Go Round. I wanted jump on, but I was too shy so I stood watching as it spun round and round fiddling with the strings on my coat. Just as I mustered up the courage to go jump on, a girl with curly blonde hair walked up to me.
She was older than me, not by much though, maybe ten. She chewed her bubble gum and twiddled with the ribbons in her hair. “So you’re from the country I suppose. Way out in the sticks.” I stayed silent. I wasn’t sure how to react. “Can’t you talk?” She asked as her cold face turned to sneer. “Hey Rebecca,” she called. “Come here. The new girl doesn’t know how to talk.” Then to me, “You must be poor ‘cus the doctors could probably fix you right up. Or maybe not.” Why was girl being so mean? I had never seen anything like it in my life. I am sure now that something was very wrong. Something that I could never know then. At this point I was trying not to cry, but tears were welling up in my eyes. I was more angry then anything. I wanted to tell her. I opened my mouth to speak when a boy who had walked up interrupted me. “Rag bag.”
“I am-” Again I was drowned out.
“Your coat is a few rags just thrown together.”
“My momma sewed them together for me we-”
“Look at her shoes!” This time it was a girl. More and more kids had swarmed around the commotion. Most of them just watched. They weren’t as mean. Though, no one came to save me. Who would want to defend the rag bag girl? I tried to explain the story of Joseph. I was always cut off by their jeers. Anger started to well up inside of me and finally it burst out.
“My coat is worth more than all your fancy rich kids’ clothes.” I screamed at the top of my lungs. The school bell started to ring. It was ignored. The kids just stood there stunned; by now I tears were already running down my face. I turned and bolted.
I ran until my lungs burned, but somehow I was still crying when I walked through the front door to my momma’s arms. But, when I felt them around me I knew they weren’t hers. I clung to him not letting go. I buried my face in his shirt and he rocked me back and forth. When I finally unclenched my hands he leaned back so he could see my face. I told him about the girl with the blond curls.
“I tried to explain, but they wouldn’t listen. Their things don’t matter. It is what is in the heart.”
“That’s a big thought for a girl your age to be thinking.”
He paused. “Can I tell you a secret?” As I nodded a small smile formed on my tear stained face.
“Those kids don’t know and probably will never know your secret.”
“What’s my secret?”
“Your big thought that I can barely hold in my big hands. They’ll never know it, but Got will and I will and Momma will and Moses will. Like him you have to learn from things that happen good and bad. You have to wear that coat with pride. Like Joseph wore his cus your not poor unless you choose to be.” I did wear that coat for the rest of that school year and the next. Patches were sewed over patches, but I always tried to follow my father’s orders. I also tried to learn from the story that I repeated in my mind many times. The coat had actually been part of the start to his problems like it was for me. Then why did my parents want me to be like him? I asked that question so many times. I would catch the answer for a while, but then it would escape me again.
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A. S.
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