This was written very spur of the moment but I'm kind of fond of it and I'm considering maybe going somewhere with it but I'm not sure yet. If I missed any grammar nitpicks, please point them out. That would be awesome, but I need a lot more focus on writing from a boys point of view (which is really weird and new for me).
*thanks*
“She’s stunning, isn’t she?” A wiry young man of twenty something dropped down next to Michael on the ledge of the building. He held a wine glass at the neck, carelessly spinning it between his fingertips.
“Yeah she is,” Michael answered watching the girl below dance, her beauty far surpassing her grace, which was magnificent in itself. Maybe he was over-exaggerating her beauty, but it was hard not to notice the glow of her flesh or the way her hips swayed perfectly under the folds of her skirt as she moved barefoot across the floor. It was hard yet not to notice the perfect symmetry of her chest, two glorious orbs of flesh draped in ivory satin. “Who is she?”
Michael was seventeen and had, only two months ago, grown out of watching cartoons and playing video games and grown into watching girls and playing with the idea of falling in love with well-endowed, Europeans.
The young man took a thoughtful sip from his glass before answering. “Her name is Emma Locke. And I’m warning you now, the girl is dangerous.” He paused and glanced at Michael critically. “By the way, who are you?” The young man extended his free hand.
“Michael,” he answered, shaking the strangers hand carefully, keeping Emma, a fragile creature in white far below on the cobbled street, visible in the corner of his eye.
“Benedetti,” he said without prompt, smile and swinging his feet back and forth childishly over the ledge.
“What did you mean when you said that she was dangerous? She looks so…”
“Beautiful. That’s the danger,” Benedetti interrupted quickly. “She’s very much like the hemlock plant. Delicate white flowers mask a terrible death. Every man who has ever gotten close to her has died, never by her hands, but always because of her.”
Michael shook his head but he didn’t have a clue of what to say without scaring Benedetti away. He couldn’t believe such a foolish notion.
“Do you mind if I ask what a fine American boy such as yourself, happens to be doing on the rooftop of the Pantheon Hotel while a party rages on in the streets below you?”
“I haven’t the slightest idea.” Well he had some idea, predominantly his fear of the crowd. Why observe it from the shadows on the ground where every eye would be on him when he could hide away on the roof.
His attention was glued to Emma, even as she stepped away from the dance floor. A group of far-inferior girls gathered around her in an instant, carrying a chorus of compliments and laugher up to the rooftop. “You’re gay, aren’t you?” Michael peeked at Benedetti for a split second.
He chuckled, straightened his red suede jacket, and downed the remainder of his drink. “One more drink and I might be.”
Michael chuckled under his breath and stood up. “I should really be going. It was nice meeting you, Benedetti.”
The stranger pulled himself up quickly and shook Michael’s hand. “Listen, I’m hosting a party tomorrow evening in Suite 312. If you want to come, you’re welcome.” Benedetti started to walk towards the door but paused and turned, his heals crunching on the gravel. “Emma will be there.” He didn’t hesitate after that and disappeared back out the service door.
When Michael shot one last, fleeting glance down at Emma, her red hair spinning as she returned to the dance floor, his heart fluttered a little. It wasn’t so much love that was growing in his chest but rather lust, a potent, deadly emotion.
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